robotchicken.
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 | November 1st, 2006 at 11:58pm Eyes swollen and red
The salty liquid was absorbed into my cloth
Street lamps so bright
No soul saw my imprisoned emotion
Rain hissed against the bench
Slowly, the bullet sized hole in my head was filled
Your memory passed but rested
Rituals repeated yearly and silent in my honor
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Idk, but I felt like telling you guys what it is im writing about even though its obvious. Basically, its about a person who killed himself or herself under a street lamp in a crowed park and no one really saw, because their love didnt acknowledge them and now they come back every year on the same day to watch people pass.
Id like comments since well Id like to improve on my poetry, I thought this one wasnt good but none the less its posted :] |
robotchicken.
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 8423
| November 2nd, 2006 at 07:26pm atleast one comment lmao XD |
JOOLS
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 | November 2nd, 2006 at 07:29pm It had a hell of a lot of emotion.
I'm emotional... I liked it.
-Julie |
Hilda the Hag
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Posts: 130 | November 2nd, 2006 at 07:42pm very emotional,yeah.but i like the concept,its different |
Miss_Minority039
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| November 2nd, 2006 at 07:43pm yeah i like it full of emiton and stuff good but  |
robotchicken.
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 8423
| November 2nd, 2006 at 07:50pm thank you :] |
