Santa Billie Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 8285 | November 3rd, 2006 at 11:46pm Parades are riots
Dances in war
Gunning down lives
They care no more
A heart explodes
A brave man dies
It drowns the sound
Of a poor man's cries
Silence is always
A government's dream
A quiet acceptance
Is what it may seem
The blood is drained
The needles are dried
We pay for stupidity
And they're not tried |
Miss_Minority039 Geek
 Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 332
| November 3rd, 2006 at 11:56pm i likey tis good *10*
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The Kill Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 8449
 | November 3rd, 2006 at 11:58pm Wow... This was really... I'm not even sure what word to use. It was really... effective =] I love it. |
Gerard Way. Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
 Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 50 | November 3rd, 2006 at 11:59pm i love it!!! i changed my name...like me new name?
its my fave. ozzy song... |
Santa Billie Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 8285 | November 4th, 2006 at 12:02am Goodbye To Romance:i love it!!! i changed my name...like me new name?
its my fave. ozzy song...
Yes.
Thanks guys
I wrote it in History class in like five minutes
I wanna make it [the poem] into a song. |
Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 | November 4th, 2006 at 09:55am I really liked it.  Didn't sound too forced... but I'd change something in the second verse. I'm not sure, but maybe using a different word than 'man' twice would work. I'm not really sure what you could do to make it better. I especially liked the first stanza and the 'parades are riots' imagery. |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921
| November 4th, 2006 at 11:55am Last stanza was a nice ending. I really liked it.  |
just_call_me_dookie Addict
 Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 12902
| November 5th, 2006 at 03:00pm I like it. it's good. plez answer my pm. |