the life of her notebook

Tearing out the words I keep inside.

Words to no one would ever hear.

My mind turned inside out,

Like and open book waiting to be read.

Excited to be turned, to follow the sentences,

That will lead you to the soul.

Flashing colors, waves of anguish.

One more day is the eternity.

My note book is my escape.

Know your self.

WOOT first post...i don't do constructive critisism or w/e you call it because i think its mean im not a mod wannabe...and that was a kwl poem

Or, in other words, you don't want to help people improve their writing. If you don't want criticism then don't post. What would be the point in posting something if you knew all you'd get was 'zomg tht was sooo kwl!!'

I liked it. Not sure if the last line fitted in with the rest of the poem, but the rest of it was pretty good. I liked the 'waves of anguish' line especially.

Ginger Nuts:

Or, in other words, you don't want to help people improve their writing. If you don't want criticism then don't post. What would be the point in posting something if you knew all you'd get was 'zomg tht was sooo kwl!!'

I liked it. Not sure if the last line fitted in with the rest of the poem, but the rest of it was pretty good. I liked the 'waves of anguish' line especially.

Yes, or he/she is simply too stupid to be able to give constructive criticism (meaning he/she doesn’t know how), alternatively he/she know nothing about poetry and therefore simply can’t give any tips.

The last line is definitely astray. Keep to your subject
I like the structure of the poem. It works and it’s interesting.
I like the metaphors such as “My mind turned inside out, Like and open book waiting to be read.”
The poem is a bit simple due to the choice of words but the wording is great.

”Words to no one would ever hear.”
Don’t know if you intended it to be this way because grammatically, or rather structure wise, it doesn’t make sense.

”Like and open book waiting to be read.”
I think you mean “an”?