sailor spaikae!
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Age: 31
Gender: Female
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  | November 11th, 2006 at 06:26pm The blade held perilously against my throat;
Ready to draw the crimson liquid,
The vicious sacrifice of 'love'.
You swore to protect me,
Yet it's you who hurts me,
Demons of darkness resurfacing.
Behind your bloodshot eyes,
Hatred and anger is all I can see,
I'm wondering if everything was a lie.
Haunted ghosts from the past,
The lies and the heartache,
Trials and tribulations.
Is this my redemption?
Shatter my heart,
Oh Romeo and scatter the ashes upon my grave.
Regrets circling through my blood,
A sodium bang,
And nothing more...
Forevermore.
Love hurts,
Hearts fail. |
I Am So Beautiful! FUCK!
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Age: 32
Gender: Female
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| November 11th, 2006 at 06:45pm You must've posted this recently, because I can't believe there are no comments so far! This was beautiful! And it was rhymy which made it flow even better.
Is this my redemption?
Shatter my heart,
Oh Romeo and scatter the ashes upon my grave.
Beautifully done. I think the Romeo part made it interesting.
Forevermore.
Love hurts,
Hearts fail.
That created the perfect ending to it. I don't know if you have posted any of poems, but I think I might search for them. Consider your poem a job well done. ^_^
Also, I'm glad this didn't end up to be some suicide poem. Not exactly. That's what I was afraid from the first line. I was wrong and glad of it. |
sailor spaikae!
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Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 1047
| November 14th, 2006 at 03:29pm Wow, thanks.
You shouldn't read that one at all.
It's not exactly my best.
I know I can do better, should've tried to.
Thanks for the comment. |
