Paper Umbrella Parade

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Mibba
November 16th, 2006 at 07:46pm
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Dedicated to a certain girl who slapped me in the face because I wouldn't kiss her. Bitch. Mr. Green

Paper Umbrella Parade

Your spit in my eye.

Chew with your mouth
Closed.
Mastication of the meager minded, You
Parade under a paper umbrella, while
We both are drenched, but I
Digress into a dichotomy of only
Hate and the
Same.

Paroxysms rarely lead to peace.

Epilepsy in excess, the
Seizures,
Fits, never suited you
at all. – An objet trouvé that
Should have stayed forgotten.
Discarded, just like your sanity
Departed.
What's in a name?
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Mibba
November 17th, 2006 at 08:44am
Listen to that sound! It’s applauds and cheers from me ^^
First of all I love the title “Paper Umbrella Parade”. Don’t ask me why, I have no answer.
I like a lot of things about the poem. I loved the structure, and the flow it created, to bits.
I also love how you made the wording complex but the poem itself rather simple.
And I like the way you highlighted some words, I thought it was rather well thought out.
Really good job, dear soul mate. Cool
Peter Petrelli
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November 17th, 2006 at 11:09am
I agree entirely, but I especially loved
'Epilepsy in excess, the
Seizures,
Fits, never suited you
at all.'
Inari
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November 17th, 2006 at 11:20am
Wow. I've really missed reading your stuff.

This one was incredible. Like you.
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Mibba
November 17th, 2006 at 02:27pm
Wow, you guys, you have no idea how much your comments mean to me. I was incredibly afraid just to scroll down the page to read them, and then they were so positive. I could almost cry right now I'm so happy.

Annnd I believe you guys have created that little bit of confidence boost I needed to bring this to my school's writing club. I was afraid to bring anything before.

Thank you again! Blush
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Mibba
November 17th, 2006 at 02:32pm
No problem, dear. We're just being honest you know Very Happy
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November 17th, 2006 at 02:39pm
Mastication of the meager minded, You
Parade under a paper umbrella, while
We both are drenched,
i really loved that bit. But hell, the whole thing was fantastic.
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Mibba
November 18th, 2006 at 11:13am
Thank youuuu. Shake
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Mibba Blog
November 18th, 2006 at 01:14pm
Finally you posted more!!
Your work is amazing.
Another excellent poem. Very well enjoyed!
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November 19th, 2006 at 09:11am
I looove the title. Wink
But I love the poem, too, it's awsome.
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November 19th, 2006 at 09:13am
That's so amazing Clap
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Mibba
November 19th, 2006 at 10:44am
You guys are so awesome. OMGyes
love.
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November 19th, 2006 at 12:50pm
wow. amazing.
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