rage;love;clark
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Posts: 494 | November 17th, 2006 at 12:10pm I can’t do anything right
So why should I even fight
At least that’s what they told me
And no one’s here to hold me
They laugh at my problems
And never help me solve them
I wish they would all die
Get them out of my eye
No
No I won’t let up
Nothing you told me makes the slightest bit of sense
No
No I won’t let up
Nothing you told me makes the slightest bit of sense
I’m falling ever faster
A walking disaster
I want to find a new place
Where I can spend my days
Away from these people
So full of evil
Even those I can trust
Should be pounded into dust
No
No I won’t let up
Nothing you told me makes the slightest bit of sense
No
No I won’t let up
Nothing you told me makes the slightest bit of sense
Lead me to my grave now
Lead me to my grave now
Lead me to my grave now
Lead me to my grave now
No
No I won’t let up
Nothing you told me makes the slightest bit of sense
No
No I won’t let up
Nothing you told me makes the slightest bit of sense
Lead me to my grave now. |
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
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 | November 18th, 2006 at 08:21am I like it ^^
But *coughs*
At least that’s what they told me
And no one’s here to hold me
Perhaps the repetition of me could be avoided? 
It’s hard to change I guess and it kinda works, but you could keep it in mind for future lyrics. |
bratbassist
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Posts: 510 | November 18th, 2006 at 08:55am I wish they would all die
Get them out of my eye
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Is the rhyming forced, or do I just not get it? |
rage;love;clark
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Posts: 494 | November 18th, 2006 at 09:31am What's in a name?:I like it ^^
But *coughs*
At least that’s what they told me
And no one’s here to hold me
Perhaps the repetition of me could be avoided?
It’s hard to change I guess and it kinda works, but you could keep it in mind for future lyrics.
well thank you |
Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
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Gender: Female
Posts: 4161 | November 18th, 2006 at 10:15am I agree entirely. The repetition could've been avoided, but it didn't affect that it was still my favourite verse of the poem.
This is actually something which grows on you. I read through it yesterday and didn't quite know how to reply. I re-read it today and thought 'yeah, I really like that'.  |
rage;love;clark
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Posts: 494 | November 19th, 2006 at 08:47am Ginger Nuts:I agree entirely. The repetition could've been avoided, but it didn't affect that it was still my favourite verse of the poem.
This is actually something which grows on you. I read through it yesterday and didn't quite know how to reply. I re-read it today and thought 'yeah, I really like that'.
 u pay attention to me?
thank you so much! |
