When You Were Screaming.

Well, it's more of a song, but I guess it can kinda be classed as poetry.
DEDS:
Casey
Nathaniel.
I dont know what I'd do without you Nathan. <33

When You Were Screaming
When you were screaming,
You were rescued,
Lifes was always on your side,
Never left you alone,
Now, you may be gone, but forever you will live on,

AND LIFE WAS ALWAYS THERE FOR YOU
AND THEY WOULD ALWAYS LOVE YOU TOO
NEVER WERE YOU LEFT ALONE
But did you see?
Could you see?

When you were lost,
You were found,
Saved at last by,
By the many who care,
Now forever,
Forever my dear,
Live on

AND LIFE WAS ALWAYS THERE FOR YOU
AND THEY WOULD ALWAYS LOVE YOU TOO
NEVER WERE YOU LEFT ALONE
But did you see?
Could you see?

YOU COULDN'T SEE,
NEVER COULD YOU SEE..

AND LIFE WAS ALWAYS THERE FOR YOU
AND THEY WOULD ALWAYS LOVE YOU TOO
NEVER WERE YOU LEFT ALONE
But did you see?
Could you see?
____________
xo
Nattie

Care dammit =]]

I like, I like

Not the best, but not the worst. Was there a need for the caps? Sorry, but it bothered me. The flow seemed a little off to me, but other than that it was decent.

Yeah, thats the bit that was screamed. Like i said, its a song, not a poem.

Zacky V_6661[MyHeartbeat]:

Yeah, thats the bit that was screamed. Like i said, its a song, not a poem.

It's quite alright, I understand it. I just think there could have been more to it than four verses repeated.

Veritas:

Zacky V_6661[MyHeartbeat]:

Yeah, thats the bit that was screamed. Like i said, its a song, not a poem.

It's quite alright, I understand it. I just think there could have been more to it than four verses repeated.

Hmm, yeah, i s'pose.
Meh.

Tis good Nattie <3333