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rage;love;clark Geek Age: - Gender: - Posts: 494	November 29th, 2006 at 07:41pm If I’m just a jukebox Then you forgot your change It’s probably somewhere in your pants That you left at home If I’m just entertainment Then I forgot my smile It’s probably somewhere in your heart Cmon kiss me let me believe I wanted you before And I still want more I don’t want to Have to write A shitty break up song That nobody likes I don’t want to Bring tears to eyes And lead hearts astray And fill hearts with lies I still love you
Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161	December 1st, 2006 at 01:44pm I really liked this one. Personally, I wouldn't have used 'It’s probably somewhere in your pants That you left at home'. The entire poem was really pretty, but those lines didn't quite fit. They would in your other poetry, but there's an aura to this which is really quite heartfelt and beautiful, and it just didn't work. But I really liked the whole jukebox imagery.
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921	December 1st, 2006 at 02:56pm I would have to agree with Ellen, but other than that it's pretty darn sweet.
newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495	December 1st, 2006 at 03:56pm Cmon is not a word. But yes, I think it's pretty good myself.
What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451	December 1st, 2006 at 06:05pm Ellaisonfire: Cmon is not a word. But yes, I think it's pretty good myself. You can give better feedback than that
tomamazon GSBitch Age: 29 Gender: Female Posts: 68084	December 2nd, 2006 at 02:27pm What's in a name?: Ellaisonfire: Cmon is not a word. But yes, I think it's pretty good myself. You can give better feedback than that She only just got back. She doesn't know the rules. And obviously, that was feedback. Any feedback is good feedback, right? K, I like it. Its kinda Blinkish. Like Ellen said like ages ago.
rage;love;clark Geek Age: - Gender: - Posts: 494	December 2nd, 2006 at 07:51pm thank you you guys
What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451	December 3rd, 2006 at 02:30pm Ben.: What's in a name?: Ellaisonfire: Cmon is not a word. But yes, I think it's pretty good myself. You can give better feedback than that She only just got back. She doesn't know the rules. And obviously, that was feedback. Any feedback is good feedback, right? K, I like it. Its kinda Blinkish. Like Ellen said like ages ago. It’s not like it’s the most difficult thing in the world to look up the rules. I wasn’t being rude or anything, was I? And did you notice that I just reminded her that there actually are rules now instead of simply deleting her post? I gave her a fair chance, did I not? Any feedback is good feedback but IDK, I think pointing out a typo just isn’t enough.

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