Wreckage

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Rotten Idiot Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 671	December 4th, 2006 at 10:05pm Wreckage See your face through the smoke and clouds And this disaster becomes a memory In the wreckage of your state of mind You whisper words too deadly for me The sun sets and casts shadows of gold With the world’s sorrow accenting the skyline Then darkness absorbs all trace of thought And another day becomes lost in time Are we here for a purpose or not at all? Is this the consequence of your actions? My voice isn’t loud enough to conquer the world But I hope I can gain your attention (chorus) Look around at where we are This battleground is still echoing I see you in a different light after dark The moon shows a different side of everything I came this far to turn back now But behind me is a long way down I don’t even know what I want anymore So I’ll leave the path you found Strange words have been tossed back and forth Now a freezing cold silence holds the air If I look back at my footsteps again Would I also see yours there? It was just a conflict up to now But now it’s lost its fun Tear-stained cheeks are no defense at all So now the war has begun
newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495	December 5th, 2006 at 08:29am Quote The sun sets and casts shadows of gold With the world’s sorrow accenting the skyline Then darkness absorbs all trace of thought And another day becomes lost in time Are we here for a purpose or not at all? Is this the consequence of your actions? My voice isn’t loud enough to conquer the world But I hope I can gain your attention My two personal favourites.
Rotten Idiot Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 671	December 5th, 2006 at 05:02pm Ellaisonfire: Quote The sun sets and casts shadows of gold With the world’s sorrow accenting the skyline Then darkness absorbs all trace of thought And another day becomes lost in time Are we here for a purpose or not at all? Is this the consequence of your actions? My voice isn’t loud enough to conquer the world But I hope I can gain your attention My two personal favourites. Thank you very mcuh- you're very kind.
Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161	December 6th, 2006 at 06:30am 'See your face through the smoke and clouds And this disaster becomes a memory In the wreckage of your state of mind You whisper words too deadly for me' I think you could've just rhymed 'memory' with 'deadly. Even if you just rephrased it as 'much too deadly' it'd work. Just a thought, it works either way. I really, really like this. It can be hard to stick to a simple rhyme scheme and not sound forced and cliched, but this flows awesomely well.
love. King For A Couple Of Days Age: - Gender: Female Posts: 2844	December 8th, 2006 at 08:33pm I really like it. It was just a conflict up to now But now it’s lost its fun Tear-stained cheeks are no defense at all So now the war has begun ...AMAZING.<3

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