All Your Fault...

I wonder if you've noticed
Or if you've just over looked
The beauty that lies inside me
Or do you just see what I wear?
This skin is just a mask
For my fragile heart,
That you don't handel with care.
I'm crying for you to stop
Though I haven't had enough.
I need you but don't want you
And the voices inside my head
Are telling me your just blind
But you've been blind for far to long
And I think it's time you've woken to see
You lost the best of me.
And I'm gone out the front door
And this time theres nothing you can do
To bring me back 'cause I'm sick of hurting
And sick of having to guess your feelings
I'm done and gone and remember,
It's all your fault...

So what you all think? Think it's the best I've written! Sad, huh?

I like it a lot, but it might look better if you put it into seperate chunks, you know? And added a couple more commas, or periods =] *shrugs* But the writing itself is really good. I sorta feel like I can relate to it ^__^ Awesome.

Thankies Jamie-Jo... lol
Yeah... I wrote this awhile back so umm... I forgot to put in the spacing and stuff... and I'm far to lazy to edit it! lol
Thanks a lot... I'll remeber spacing next time!

*Makes mental note: Spacing...*

MJ:

Thankies Jamie-Jo... lol
Yeah... I wrote this awhile back so umm... I forgot to put in the spacing and stuff... and I'm far to lazy to edit it! lol
Thanks a lot... I'll remeber spacing next time!

*Makes mental note: Spacing...*

XD And yes, I forgot to tell you to keep writing 'cause I'd love to see more of your stuff

lol thankies! lol

Wait a sec... what does XD mean? lol
I only know the basics...

i really like it. you had really good choice of words.
To bring me back 'cause I'm sick of hurting
And sick of having to guess your feelings
I'm done and gone and remember,
It's all your fault...
......AMAZING!

Slash? Hell yes!(YSD):

XD is a smiley. If you tilt your head to the left you'll see a sorta... laugh-y-ish face... O_O Yah. [but this comment is off-topic and going to get deleted] X] Heh.

Yeah, off topic Use PM next time

Thankies for the comments. They do me better than on other sites were every one sends in the same comment which is, "Good Job" which doesn't really help me... So thanks for that.
Sorry 'bout the off topic thing... won't happen again. XD

I wonder if you've noticed
Or if you've just over looked
The beauty that lies inside me
Or do you just see what I wear?

Is my favourite part. I love it! I like the fact a lot of girls could relate to it

Lol... had this thing with this guy and when he moved away it was like I wasn't there. It's like he didn't see the person inside. It kind of hurt so I got around to writing A LOT of poetry when he didn't call. I'm kind of glad he's gone though. I wana get over it and move on. But the whole thing really helped with my writing. Thanks, glad you liked it! XD