newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 42495
 | December 8th, 2006 at 01:29pm Love and Sex,
Sex and Love,
Cramped riots shaped in heartbeats.
Sex and Love,
Love and Sex,
Buried under heavy sheets.
A polaroid picture perfect;
Fail me now, my common sense.
Drugs and Sex,
Drugs and Sex,
Sound effects,
Sound effects.
Introverted killers,
Extroverted midnight kiss,
All of this.
All of this...
The vicious floor, my only lay,
You know it fits me like a glove.
And all this sex we speak of
Has no eyes for love.
* a playful experiment. Meant to be a song. Criticism more than welcome. |
votefordisco
Rotting On Here
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 45710
| December 8th, 2006 at 01:36pm I really like that. I'm not completely sure why, but it has a nice feel to it and...I can't explain it. I like what it makes me think of [and I don't mean that in a sexual way, just so you know].
I know I'm not meant to comment unless it's contructive...so I don't know why I am. But I felt the need to tell you that I like it, because I do. |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 2921
| December 8th, 2006 at 02:39pm That is awesome. 
I would love to hear it as a song, because the flow. Oh my. It could be so darn catchy. And obviously, I love the material within the spiffyness as well.  |
Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 4161 | December 8th, 2006 at 03:02pm You know, if it were a song it'd be one of those really damn catchy songs that get stuck in your head all day, you can't stop singing it because you love it so much...
And the last verse it absolutely gorgeous. The best thing about it is that it has a real message, written poetically and beautifully. |
