The GSB Writers Circle.

It's annoying when people do that, isn't it? Especially that one person in particular...*is trying very hard not to mention names*

Oooh and Ginger Nuts can choose the next topic.

Yaaaaaaaaay! Do I have to post it now or when the deadline is up on Monday?

Ginger Nuts:

Yaaaaaaaaay! Do I have to post it now or when the deadline is up on Monday?

I dunno...I think whenever is okay.

I'm going to go away and think; something to challenge your poetic brains.

http://www.geekstinkbreath.net/board/viewtopic.php?p=5331847#5331847

Phew, I made it in time!

Ella - That was absolutely amazing. I think the last two stanzas are my favourite, especially the line 'Oh wake up, you faded shadow!' There's not really much else I can say about it other than it's beautiful.

Duck - Didn't care for the flow too much, but I'd agree with what Ellen said about the religious imagery being conveyed as love in the poem.

Joan - Your style is absolutely breathtaking. I'm sure I've said that before, but it's true. The words you use. And another thing, your style is incredibly your own, too. I could look at a poem and know immediately that it was you who wrote it. ILOVEYOU.

lyrical_gahhh - The last two stanzas = love. Me + them: Great flow, it really kept the whole thing together. On the whole, awesomeee.

Ellen - As ever, when I read your poem I can sense your love for adjectives, and I think it transcends to the reader. So in that sense, I love adjectives! But really, your description is always amazing and your metaphors are always unique.

Electrocore Panda.:

lyrical_gahhh - The last two stanzas = love. Me + them: Great flow, it really kept the whole thing together. On the whole, awesomeee.

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Which one? I submitted two?

I'm going out now, so I'll come back later to read yours. Bye!

lyrical_gaah52:

Electrocore Panda.:

lyrical_gahhh - The last two stanzas = love. Me + them: Great flow, it really kept the whole thing together. On the whole, awesomeee.

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Which one? I submitted two?

I'm going out now, so I'll come back later to read yours. Bye!

Oh oops, I meant the first one.

Topic running from January 8th - 22nd will be...

Adrenaline

Told you I'd make you think!! Now, there's lots of ways you could interpret this in many ways. You could talk about fear and anxiety, sports, recklessness, rollercoasters; you could even write about Richard Hammond driving into a wall if you wanted to.

Ginger Nuts:

Topic running from January 8th - 22nd will be...

Adrenaline

Told you I'd make you think!! Now, there's lots of ways you could interpret this in many ways. You could talk about fear and anxiety, sports, recklessness, rollercoasters; you could even write about Richard Hammond driving into a wall if you wanted to.

Oooh. I really will have to think about that...I luff you. I already know what I'm going to write about. Its so perfect. I just have to get it into words...

I figured that it's slightly easier to write about a concept, than a physical idea. I wracked my little earth brain to bring you something different.

I have a rough draft. I'm going to change it like everyday until its perfect. Because its a really can't describe that feeling.

lyrical_gaah52:

I found a second poem for the Circle before it ends! Woot! Joan and Rose have read this one before. It was the second
one I posted on GSB. And I know Rose doesn't like it.

How very not nice of me
I can remembere reding it but I can't recall what I said abot it =P Perhaps
I thought it was banal or something. I think it's sorta witty when reding it
now but I'm still not that found of it

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Ella: I can’t understand why you hate it! I absolutely love it.
It’s art! (um, yeah that’s a compliment btw ). I think it’s so perfectly
written, just the right words in the right place etc. And it has such a
awesome flow. It’s just beautiful!

Duck: I like it. Noting extraordinary, and as Ellen says; the structure wasn’t
too stable. I like the phrasing though it’s nice. Seems sort of “old”, if you
know what I mean.

Joan: Same as always: brilliant You know what I think of your poetry.

lyrical_gaah52: I really like it (Mutually Destructive). It would indeed make
awesome lyrics. Not sure I liked “one iota better” though. It just felt off to me.

Ellen: I like to quote our friend panda: “your description is always amazing
and your metaphors are always unique.” (how very creative of me, not ).
Anyway, I love it. Simple as that ^_^

Panda: There’s just something lacking. I think it’s the passion your poetry
usually has. It’s more thoughtful than passionate, if you get what I mean.
Philosophical as Ellen said. But it’s not bad. It’s in fact, awesome.
Brilliantly written, dear soulmate

Omg I made it in time O_O
I hope I stayed on topic

All Storms Lull, Sooner or Later

The mirror calmly reflects forms within the frame
Of blue heaven above and vivid earth around, but
raging currents whirl restlessly behind the surface.
A maelstrom soon rises from the gloomy depths
and tears the tranquility to shreds.

Crushed are the reflecting ponds of the soul
by a turmoil waging storms behind the eyelids.
Waves lashes up and foaming white horses
beat themselves unconscious on the retina.

Tiredly hope sinks deeper down in darkening water,
wet wings are weighting heavily on every move, and
salvation seems to whisper one last, soft goodbye.
The mind floods, bursting the damns, and water
escapes by tumbling through the iris.

The storm passes leaving two devastated
lakes behind but as the wind lulls they mend.
The shattered pieces all float back into place
as long as there only is an ounce of faith.

Fear not the storm, nor the fury of the water
Because all storms, even the wildest, do lull.

Beyond my dreaming, closing eyes-a hectic, crazy place
And if I choose to open them, I’ll come face to face
With a nightmare so repetitive, you’d think that they would learn…
But with every step we take of greed, another fire burns.
Another hidden explosive in the minds of fragile youths,
And if we don’t fix our mistakes, what do we think we’ll do?
Will the god we’ve worshipped for so long, come and save us then-
Or has even it turned its back on our reckless, speeding trends?

There.
That's all I could come up with. I'm bent on trying to make a new type of poem but I keep getting back to the subject of our world dying...
I need inspiration.

Hoooooooomg I'm going to work really hard on this because I likie the topic lots.

i really want to do one now.
adrenaline is a good one. im going to go to my corner and think about this *thinks*

What's in a name? - This has to be one of your most accomplished poems to date - your poem has always a simplicity in the language you use because of English not being your mother tongue; so not everyone can write like you. But this was so skilled, you'd think you'd spoken English your whole life; the metaphors of irises and retina for the 'eye of the storm' were beautiful.

Dead End Girl - Maybe not entirely to the topic, but it was very desperately beautiful. I especially loved the lines 'I've got an shot of adrenaline
Unfortunately, it was in my lung
It's getting harder to breathe in
It's making this young heart sting'.

Kris_the_demon - Hmmmm. I'm not sure about this. What I do know is that the first line grabbed me really hard; I LOVED 'eyes-a-hectic'. I think maybe it was the length. What you wrote was pretty awesome, and you could've really gone into detail... I'm not sure if that makes any sense.

I wanna free my soul - 'And the bullets make this erotic sound And our eyes become our ghost'. I thought those lines were the best part of the entire poem. I thought you had some awesome ideas, but it didn't flow too well and in places it was a little cliched... 'Between the gas and the earth And I barely breath once again'. I had to quote those lines too, they were great.