Merry Weather.

Don't ask, don't tell.

These mercurial mortals
amuse me - somewhat.

I am as constant and predictable
as the moon-dragged tides of these
benign seas. This place is a mystery
to me.

I'm from a different world
entirely.

I sit confined in these queer little
desks and quaint little chairs at a
strange gathering place called 'school'.

I am unaccustomed to this.

Weird curlicues in soft porous
rock written on a ebony board.

To me; it's art. A fragment of a wing;
forgotten by some monstrous sonnetfly.

To you; it is a practise called 'home work'.

I am growing weary of this incompetent
fool called a teach-aa raising the volume of the
noise in the classroom to silence and
thrusting it sordidly in my direction.

Does he not know? Does he not realise?

I smile sweetly with the storm crackling
underneath my skin like a static electricity.

I rumble lowly out of that room and stalk onto
the scrubland suburban excuse
for a field.

The foul sludge thickens around my ankles and
threatens to drag me down, but the muck is
no match for me.

The words. Those magic mouthfuls
of syllables and vowels trip almost
accidentally from my lips and so begins.

So it begins.

My fingers flash into lucid lightning
and licks at the building walls.
Now they scream, they are rightfully terrified.
My hair thickens into thunderclouds and my body into
spurts of hail and rain.

My eyes, like the schizophrenic fools they are
dissolve into a parabola of colour.

Rainbows are for innocence
not these hypocrites.

Oh my.


I love it.

The lines are just so sophisticated and stuff.
Its so realistic

Its amazing x

Wowee. It's all like long words and shit.



Pretty fucking amazing. Although you could put a capital on the beginning of each verse though (a verse is a line, right? it is so in french, anyway).


Whatever the case, I love it.

And if anyone asks....yes, I am abusing the smiley.

Snow White Queen:

Wowee. It's all like long words and shit.



Pretty fucking amazing. Although you could put a capital on the beginning of each verse though (a verse is a line, right? it is so in french, anyway).


Whatever the case, I love it.

And if anyone asks....yes, I am abusing the smiley.

I dunno I don't really know technical terms. I just write.

I don't do the whole capital-at-each-line thing because it helps my flow without it.

Snow White Queen:

Pretty fucking amazing. Although you could put a capital on the beginning of each verse though (a verse is a line, right? it is so in french, anyway).

That’s not something you have to do as long as people can understand when a sentence end and another begins (4th) . ^_^

A verse is a stanza (it has several lines). A line is a row and it’s often a sentence or part of a sentence.

Wow. Big words but they work xD
Its great and i really like it.

You really have a sophistication that so many people can't write with. A quality that makes it sound like you've been writing for so much longer.
To me; it's art. A fragment of a wing;
forgotten by some monstrous sonnetfly.

Those lines were the sex. Seriously.

I think I might have broken
'Rainbows are for innocence
not these hypocrites' up with a comma after 'innocence', but that's just my opinion.

Sorry I haven’t commented earlier.

You know what I think about your poetry . You have such a wonderful way with words and your phrasing is simply amazing. It’s like you’ve been doing this forever (and I know you haven’t, I looked through this forum for nostalgic reasons. Read your old poems, and others, but yeah ). In any case, I love your metaphors, similes and your word choice. I also adore the structure, as always, and I think your poem have a wonderful flow and rhythm.

If I hade one tiny bit of constructive criticism it would be the same as Ellen mentioned, about the comma after innocence. I think it looks and sounds better that way. Otherwise it’s a beautiful ending (and an amazing poem of course).

amazing.
i love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!