Your Tears

Another.

Tears, tears,
Falling like stars unto the ground.
Salty bodies of sorrow haunt
Her porcelain cheeks so cold and
Alone.

Tears, tears,
Like silent armies, they march along.
Stealthy, wary, wolves of the woods,
Across blood-soaked battlefields.
Alone.


I hate myself.

-_-
Please, enough with that. Putting yourself done I mean. If your poem hadn’t been as good as it is I would have tore it apart regardless of that comment of yours. Don’t fish for complements, you’re too good a poet to do that

You’re poem is very (and I mean very) good. It’s even great. Ok, it’s fantastic. =]
Normally I tell people not to use repetition (anaphor) but guess what? You did it correctly and I adore it! Your poem also had a good flow and great rhythm. The metaphors were really what made it especially wonderful of course. Because thanks to them it really doesn’t matter that the poem is short and the subject rather common. Your way with words truly made this poem special.

Sorry. I was really peeved and cynical last night and I was sort of just venting out. I wasn't fishing for compliments, just saying that I don't like the poems I write regardless of what you guys say (though it's very rewarding, I tell you) and I post them to find ways of improving them.
I hate myself for not being able to make my words the way I want them to go, that's all.

As for saying that I'm 'too good a poet for that', you're really too kind. I can in no way live up to any of the high standards you guys set, and really, I'm just an amateur in a world of professionals.

Thank you. I really am loving the whole repetition thing. I love it, but sometimes I don't use it well at all.

And really, I can't thank you enough for saying I have a way with words. It's truly the biggest compliment you could've evr made. Really. Thank you.

tht poems ace! i dnt get y u hate it so much, i tink you wrote tht very well (n i mean it)
stop puttin urself down!!!

VW xxxx

Thank you very much. Although I didn't understand much of what you just said, I get the main idea (that you like it).

THe only reason I put myself is 'cause I was taught to: my parents always thought I had too much of a big head and put me down, and in the end I got so sick of it I did it myself.

Gorgeous. I think you're going to improve so much. It's deliciously short and sweet, and whilst I usually dislike repetition, you really know how to use it to full effect. And the imagery of 'porcelain cheeks' was beautiful.

*hugs you* I'm really enjoying reading your work here.