Separated

I'd love to have some feedback! This is only a first draft....

Sometimes I guess I wonder
What's so great about straight lines
I don't really understand
Why our entire lives must be timed

Is there really a point to freedom?
'Cause our values are written in stone
There's nothing I can really do
When my future is not my own

You never speak my language
I understand your words though
And even though we're neighbors
Our affection is only for show

(chorus)
Separated by a tear
I don't know why it's even there
Separated by a point of view
And now I think much less of you

Sometimes I guess I wonder
Why we must all be the same
What's so bad about stepping out
And never feeling shame?

Maybe you could tell me
'Cause I don't know why I'm wrong
Why am I a bad person
For singing a different song?

Is there really a point to freedom?
'Cause our values are written in stone
There's nothing I can really do
When my future is not my own

(chorus)

I really liked this. You have an ability to rhyme without sounding forced and cliched, and it has a steady, bouncing rhythm, which has always been a personal love of mine.

'You never speak my language
I understand your words though'.

I especially liked those lines. Admittedly, it broke the flow a little, but I thought that was good; it gave a subtle change from a set pattern, which you need in lyrics.

I love it.

Thanks to both of you! I really appreciate it!