Stage Girl

I'd really like some constructive advice on this. Be as blunt as possible. Its the only way i will learn to be better. Say you hate the whole thing if you must.
Thanks.

Hide,
behind your stage make up,
Shine,
only because of lights and glitter.
Shout,
to cover you weak intentions.
Shadow,
your closest friends into cold enemies.
Burn,
the stage is on fire now where will you go.
Evil,
revealed in the sunlight.
Stage Girl,
you won't find the answer in a script.
Stage Girl,
the curtain won't close on this problem.
Stage Girl.

Wow, this is awesome, I'm not just saying that. it sounds kinda like lyrics to a song

Thanks.