Stay Away. [Uber creative, I know.]

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The Kill
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December 30th, 2006 at 01:52am
This isn't a poem. It's... song lyrics. Smile

I’ve said it many times before,
And I’ll say it again.
I don’t need your pity,
And I don’t want your “respect”.
Save your apologies,
They’ll fall on deaf ears.
I’m sick of your shit,
Done housing these fears.

Just stay away from me.
Stay away…
Just stay away from me.
Just stay the fuck away!

I’m feeling better these days,
Without your voice in my mind.
Don’t ruin it for me,
The result won’t be kind.
My world is finally healing,
And my body too.
Don’t dare taint my name,
When telling untruths.

Just stay away from me.
Stay away…
Just stay away from me.
Just stay the fuck away!

I’ve cleansed myself of your lies,
Your poisonous words.
Your suspicious eyes,
And I’m free from your curse.
Your lips, smile,
With that hideous twist.
Every inch of you forgotten,
You no longer exist.

Just stay away from me.
Stay away…
Just stay away from me.
Just stay the fuck away!

***

I know most of you are not going to like the Chorus, but my only excuse is I was pissed when I wrote this and it's all I could think of Embarassed I'm open to any suggestions for it XD
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December 30th, 2006 at 01:56am
I love it! I didn't really like the chorus bit, but that's just me. It'd make a great song, though. Keep it up! Smile
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December 30th, 2006 at 02:00am
Veritas:
I love it! I didn't really like the chorus bit, but that's just me. It'd make a great song, though. Keep it up! Smile

Yeah, I've already got the guitar written out for it and together it sounds pretty sweet Smile Thanks
The Kill
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December 30th, 2006 at 10:51pm
No one else wants to tell me what they think? tehe
My Chemical Romance!
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December 31st, 2006 at 02:02pm
I’ve cleansed myself of your lies,
Your poisonous words.
Your suspicious eyes,
And I’m free from your curse.


That's amazing. (=
The Kill
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January 1st, 2007 at 03:54pm
Saint.:
I’ve cleansed myself of your lies,
Your poisonous words.
Your suspicious eyes,
And I’m free from your curse.


That's amazing. (=

Thanks tehe
Hello, My Name Is Asshole
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January 2nd, 2007 at 12:20am
Cheese Sorry 'bout not noticing it.

But yes, I agree with the posts above. It's really well written and.. rhymes nicely and not too much. Not like those Dr. Seuss rhymes that kind of get annoying. Neutral

On the other hand, the chorus does seem a bit repetitive, but since it's a song, it doesn't matter. You don't see anyone complaining about Hilary Duff's song where the only lyrics are "to the beat of my heeaEaaARaartrt."

So, good job, Dizzle. I'd love to hear you sing it. ~~ Hm? Hmmmm? XD
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January 2nd, 2007 at 12:25am
Hello, My Name Is Asshole:
Cheese Sorry 'bout not noticing it.

But yes, I agree with the posts above. It's really well written and.. rhymes nicely and not too much. Not like those Dr. Seuss rhymes that kind of get annoying. Neutral

On the other hand, the chorus does seem a bit repetitive, but since it's a song, it doesn't matter. You don't see anyone complaining about Hilary Duff's song where the only lyrics are "to the beat of my heeaEaaARaartrt."

So, good job, Dizzle. I'd love to hear you sing it. ~~ Hm? Hmmmm? XD

*ignores Hilary Duff comment* XDXD

Thank ya ^__^ I might let you hear it... eventually... some day... tehe
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January 2nd, 2007 at 12:30am
DAMMIT CHIPPEH!!




J'adore eet.

SING, MY SWEET. SING!
The Kill
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January 2nd, 2007 at 12:35am
SEx<3'sYsD&TCd!!1!:
DAMMIT CHIPPEH!!




J'adore eet.

SING, MY SWEET. SING!

Shocked

[sings]THANKYOOOO. I'MGLADYOULIKEEEEETT!![/singing]
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January 4th, 2007 at 01:08pm
Slash? Hell yes!(YSD):
Hello, My Name Is Asshole:
Cheese Sorry 'bout not noticing it.

But yes, I agree with the posts above. It's really well written and.. rhymes nicely and not too much. Not like those Dr. Seuss rhymes that kind of get annoying. Neutral

On the other hand, the chorus does seem a bit repetitive, but since it's a song, it doesn't matter. You don't see anyone complaining about Hilary Duff's song where the only lyrics are "to the beat of my heeaEaaARaartrt."

So, good job, Dizzle. I'd love to hear you sing it. ~~ Hm? Hmmmm? XD

*ignores Hilary Duff comment* XDXD

Thank ya ^__^ I might let you hear it... eventually... some day... tehe


*was not compairing you to Hilary Duff, btw* O__O
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January 10th, 2007 at 03:36pm
Hello, My Name Is Asshole:


*was not compairing you to Hilary Duff, btw* O__O

You better not have been Cool
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January 10th, 2007 at 07:01pm
XD I wasn't.

See, there's a bit of a difference. You = pwnage. Hilary Duff = Stupid dumb ugly. Raspa
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