Backway Alleys

Bruises on lips and then,
Knees, and hands on hips,
Fingers in hair, guiding and searching,
Reaching and cursing,
Wanting and pleading and,
Eyes are needing.

The building of lust,
And trembles which must,
Shatter through the body,
And buckle knees,
And please, please,
Oh god, please.

The release and climax,
Time to relax , but no,
Back on your feet and
Back to the street,
The echo of whore that,
Shakes your core.

The need to feel wanted,
The want to feel needed,
The bruises on hips and
The come on lips,
The change in your pocket,
Clinking as you walk.

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K, so please don't beat me up or anything. This is my first ever poem except for one about a hedgehog I did in year 3 and I just got the first stanza when I was trying to sleep a couple of nights ago so I just, embelished on it a bit.

I have no poetic knowledge so feel free to critisize it as much as you like

You did it!
I liked it.
The rhyme didn't seem too forced and it had a nice rhtythm. I don't like rhyme but you did it well. A little bit of repitition but yeah. For a first try, great

Hannah is one sexy-ified bitch. SO KJDHFG

I actually really love this. The rhyme is incredible and the flow spectacular. Besides that I really like the content as well. Your wording was amazing. I think I'm in love.

as i said before, i really like this. as you've been told, the rhyming is brilliant and the flow is nice. i think it's also rather abstract, and i like that in poems. the theme is interesting too, not just your typical poem because it's really got that... i don't know. i can't explain it. there's just something different about this and i love it.

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Thank you everyone ^_^

Like I said, it was my first poem and I'm glad that you all didn't jump on my back at how poor it is xD

That was great. It was goodto begin with, great to go on- and a awesome ending.