_maybe_someone_loves_me_ Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
 Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 35 | January 16th, 2007 at 08:23am I got an F, slice
I got in a fight, slice
I forget my necklace
the one he gave me, slice
I didn't make the team, slice
Slice after Slice take me away
take me to Paradiese
Take me to where the understand
Take my hand and look, don't
say "Why" just say "I understand"
I got an F, you understand
I got in a fight, you understand
I forgot your necklace, you
understand
I didn't make the team, you understand
I'm in paradiese.
With you |
Mrs. Lee Jackass
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 1428
| January 16th, 2007 at 10:07am Paradise.*
Um. It doesn't have a good Idea for the poem.
I just that maybe you could used to different words rather then slice
And maybe even understand
You could of put hidden meanings, and metorphoric words, to make it longer and more poetic.
But it's a good start.  |