Values of life

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Milk
King For A Couple Of Days
Milk
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 3741

Mibba Blog
February 17th, 2007 at 03:48am
Values of Life
Love and pursuit of
Wisdom
By Intellectual Means
and Self-Discipline

We search for knowledge
And enjoy the passion
Of our own means
Our philosophy

Silence, fatigue on loneliness
Searching for the answers
Regrets of our decisions
Yet we continue to search

With who do we reside?
Our hollows, our lives
When god awakes we find
We are just a shallow lie.
wait_what
Geek
wait_what
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Gender: Female
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Mibba Blog
February 18th, 2007 at 06:22pm
That last line is pure amazingness. Very Happy

I really loved this poem, but I'm not too keen on the opening stanza. It just doesn't seem to convey a complete thought like the other 3 stanzas do.

Other than that, I love it!
Milk
King For A Couple Of Days
Milk
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 3741

Mibba Blog
February 19th, 2007 at 01:58am
Thanks. I'm not too proud of the opening stanza, eighter. It was more of a thing to get me going when I write.
Usually, when I do write, the last stanza is the best.
Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
Peter Petrelli
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 4161
February 23rd, 2007 at 12:07pm
I really liked this - a very straight forward approach to the topic, but very well written and accessible. The last stanza was a particular favourite of mine; it was like everything else was intended purely to cement that one ending line. Great job. Very Happy
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