Poisoned Darkness

Chorus:
its the darkness inside
thats killing you
poisoning you
tearing you down from the inside
killing you,
an endless circle of torture
i cannot watch, i cannot care

1:
its just the darkness inside
with you and your shadow
the relationship you have
with your beloved razorblade
put an end to your misery
ask me to slit your neck
can't you see? -

Chorus:
its the darkness inside
thats killing you
poisoning you
tearing you down from the inside
killing you,
an endless circle of torture
i cannot watch, i cannot care

2:
its just the darkenss inside
your only lonely blurred vision
you want to be left,
self-induced lack of rationality
you plead at my feet
ask me to slit your neck
can't you see? -

Chorus:
its the darkness inside
thats killing you
poisoning you
tearing you down from the inside
killing you,
an endless circle of torture
i cannot watch, i cannot care

Bridge:
structurised distruction of yourself
the poison is eating you from the inside
consuming your intestines and soul
dragging you into the dephs of the darkened water
the lost side of the moon, mindnumbing pain
the poison is eating you from the inside
can't you see? -

Chorus:
its the darkness inside
thats killing you
poisoning you
tearing you down from the inside
killing you,
an endless circle of torture
i cannot watch, i cannot care

This poem is maybe a bit too depressing and sad for me, but in general it's good.

I really love the idea that the song is conveying, but I'm just not too sure about the word choice... The chorus is amazing, but the first verse is a bit cliche. The second verse is good, and the bridge is really amazing.

Seriously, if you could get the rest of the song as amazing as the bridge, it'd be really awesome.

yeah, and if i could only learn how to play with overdrive without having it feel very demeaning it would be amazing aswell. it would be very good with screaming. thanks for the advice, when i get some free time i will deal with it