Jigsawess
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 2640 | March 12th, 2007 at 08:38am Things weren't meant to turn out this way.
You took away my feelings and replaced them with a thousand more.
I guess I'm left with nothing more to say,
I've never felt this betrayed before.
Take away my pain and sorrow.
Twist it and shape it to make things work.
Turn this hell I feel into something I want to know.
Something that won't hurt.
Don't look at me like I'm doing something wrong,
It's only right to leave now that it's not too late.
You'll slowly shatter me before too long,
And I'll be left a pile of broken bones and pure hate.
Take away my pain and sorrow.
Twist it and shape it to make things work.
Turn this hell I feel into something I want to know.
Something that won't hurt.
I can't deny I've felt for you in the past,
I really thought you were the other half to my whole.
Now I see you for who you are at last,
Someone who could never help such a tortured soul.
Take away my pain and sorrow.
Twist it and shape it to make things work.
Turn this hell I feel into something I want to know.
Something that won't hurt.
There's a distance between us now,
It doesn't feel at all right.
But at least I know now how
Love can be so black and white.
Any comments/constructive critisism?
I wrote this just after a bout of writers block, so I'm a bit iffy about it. |
Ex.Of.A.Freak.-TCD
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 87
Gender: Female
Posts: 5844
 | March 15th, 2007 at 02:50pm But at least I know now how
Love can be so black and white.
Perfect ending.
Yes... I could see that you were struggling a bit. But thats just because you were getting over writers block. Completely understandable.
A little cliche over all, but it was still alright. Keep trying. =] |
PONED
Geek
Age: -
Gender: Female
Posts: 257 | March 18th, 2007 at 02:14pm awesome. |
Jigsawess
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 2640 | March 19th, 2007 at 09:06am Thankyou =) |
