lyrical_mess
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 5278
  | April 3rd, 2007 at 10:35am I wrote a bunch while I've been away from GSB and faced GSB withdrawal syndrome. So, today and tomorrow, I'll be posting three a day. K? K.
Ride, Boldly Ride
The golden man
A holy land
Our kind will never cease
For searching.
And who looks around
Feet on the ground
To realize
What's happening?
Burning, burning, erupting the sky
Our dreams among the stars
Burning beautiful, so bright.
And through the thirsts, unquenchable quests,
Few have stopped to see
That this world, whirring, spinning
Was never quite what it used to be. |
Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | April 3rd, 2007 at 06:50pm I don't know why but I really love this poem. Maybe it's something not meant to be figured out, but there's something in the images and words that really speaks to me.
The last two verses are really beautiful. |
Ex.Of.A.Freak.-TCD
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 87
Gender: Female
Posts: 5844
| April 3rd, 2007 at 07:03pm The last verses are pretty okay, but this poem didn't really suit my tastes. Although, I do try to take in everything, I found myself not really liking this... Maybe the simplicity was a little too much?
Little cliche' too.
But it's okay, you'll get the hang of it. =] |
lyrical_mess
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 5278
| April 4th, 2007 at 05:48am Hang of what? Poetry? I've already got the hang of it.
And actually, if you don't mind, I'd like to know what's cliche about it. But thanks for reading. Sruti likes feeeeeeedback!
And Raini! Hey! Glad you liked it. I tried a really different style with this one, so I'm glad my experiment was a success! |
