Sylar
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 5703 | April 7th, 2007 at 04:29am Never cursed to a life of banality
Dancing through days like leaves on the wind
No one noticed, no one but me
I watched, I smiled, wondering what beauty you’d bring
Coming and going like seasons changing,
Blissful laughter, never ageing
Ignorance and youth leading you to believe your immortality
If only we could have seen, would we?
It goes out to an amazing friend I recently lost in a crash. I'll never forget the beauty he showed me in the silliest of things and I know he wouldn't have regretted a thing. He truely lived for the moment. Kiss. |
newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 42495
 | April 7th, 2007 at 07:36am i like it.
the word choice is pretty good.
the flow is off, though.
but what matters is you wrote it honestly, led by emotions. and that's all that counts, really. |
Sylar
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 5703 | April 9th, 2007 at 01:48am Thank you, I don't think it would have been any better if I'd spent hours on it thinking of exactly the right wording etc. |
Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 4161 | April 10th, 2007 at 05:43am I agree, the flow isn't perfect, but I think when the words are a little more original than most, then the flow isn't always as noticable.
At least, in my opinion.
I really liked it.  |
Riot Gurl
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 40
 | April 10th, 2007 at 02:36pm I like it alot it sounds beautiful!!!!!!!!!!! |
Sylar
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 5703 | April 11th, 2007 at 05:46am Thank you guys, it's appreciated a lot
xox |
