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Posts: 257 | April 21st, 2007 at 03:33pm A girl Like me would look in the mirror and cry
She would feel her hair and want to die
A Girl Like Me would sit in a dark room
She would find herself caught up in doom
A Girl Like Me would not face her fears
Her whole face would always be covered in tears
A Girl Like Mehas locked feelings inside
She would have to scream in pain, then hide
A Girl Like Mewould never smile
For happy things aren't worth while
A Girl Like Mewould shout in pain
For no reason, scream in vain
ButA Girl Like Mewould never fake a kiss
When she's in love, she'll never miss
A Girl Like Meis always in love
Because her true heart is from above
<3 |
Ex.Of.A.Freak.-TCD
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 | April 21st, 2007 at 05:12pm =] I liked it. Simple. short, and sweet.
I wasn't so sure when I started reading, but it was very good. Nice wording choices.
 Good job, love. |
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Posts: 257 | April 21st, 2007 at 05:46pm thank you soo much!! luv ya |
Ex.Of.A.Freak.-TCD
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| April 21st, 2007 at 05:57pm xHeartache To Singx:thank you soo much!! luv ya Haha.  You're welcome! Love you too, sugar.  |
La Tua Cantante
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 | April 21st, 2007 at 06:18pm Lindsey you are so pretty!
and someone is going to love you a lot.....theres over like 2 billion people in the world....there HAS to be someone! lol....but whoever will love you, i knwo you will lvoe them a lot too and I know that you not going to let them down. you are beautiful inside and out.
but i love the poem! ************************* |
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Posts: 257 | April 21st, 2007 at 06:20pm thank you so much kristen!  |
Destination_Unknown
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Posts: 105 | April 22nd, 2007 at 05:54pm I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!..... wow its deep and very interesting. i love it
great job |
wait_what
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| April 22nd, 2007 at 06:20pm Your rhymes are cliche, and sounds very forced. You also need to go back and put in spaces- otherwise it gets difficult to read.
I did like the 2nd to last couplet, though.
But I feel that you really need to work on your poetry.
Keep writing! |
PaNcAkEs
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| April 23rd, 2007 at 05:00am horribly sweet, the first part was rather sad, the kiss and heart part were cute. Short and simple... keep it up, it works for you. |
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Posts: 257 | April 23rd, 2007 at 09:18pm thanks!! |
