Ex.Of.A.Freak.-TCD
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 87
Gender: Female
Posts: 5844
 | May 18th, 2007 at 08:22pm Maybe you could learn to love me,
After you've learned to care.
Maybe then you'd know I'm drowning,
In hatred and dispair.
Maybe we could sail the ocean,
And paint the valleys green.
Spread some stars across the skyline-
A perfect romance scene.
Maybe I could kiss you gently,
And whisper "I love you,"
But oh, my dear, that would be foolish,
For that's something you'd never do.
Little iffy about the ending.
Don't judge too harsh on this...
I'm just in an emotional state over my girlfriend right now.
Comment away. |
PONED
Geek
Age: -
Gender: Female
Posts: 257 | May 20th, 2007 at 11:54am omg. This is absolutley beautiful
The ending was fine. Don't worry.
I liked the rhyming rhythym!
This is sorta like the stage I''m in too with my boyfriend o_0
Anyway, I loved it. Great job!
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[[PoliticalPunk.]]
Geek
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 182
| May 22nd, 2007 at 09:52am Love it...
ending was great.
Flowed well & easy to relate too |
