lyrical_mess Falling In Love With The Board
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![Blog](/data/images/blog.gif) | May 22nd, 2007 at 03:29am Beggarmaid
I swear I'm not cruel,
That if I could
I would do
Anything for you.
I'm sorry, little boy.
I'm sorry.
It breaks my heart.
It makes me afraid.
I can't help but turn away,
Close the door on your face,
Run away.
I'm sorry, old crone.
I'm sorry.
This fear
Makes me feel
Incompetent. |
[[PoliticalPunk.]] Geek
![[[PoliticalPunk.]]](/data/board-avatars/empty.gif) Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 182
![Blog](/data/images/blog.gif) | May 22nd, 2007 at 09:40am *incompetent i believe is the right spelling, but im apparently partly dyslexic so i could be wrong....o_o
as for the poem its self....short, but deep =]
it makes me feel kinda sad, cause ive never been in that situation, but ive been in the place of the person theyre apologising to. kinda sheds a new light?
*likes* |
The Doctor Falling In Love With The Board
![The Doctor](/data/board-avatars/00002/125933556708229.jpg) Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 8786
![Blog](/data/images/blog.gif) | May 22nd, 2007 at 12:18pm It looks good to me.
Anyway, so much said in such small words. Terrfic use of the repitition and use of crone. |
PaNcAkEs Jackass
![PaNcAkEs](/data/board-avatars/00003/130791219647600.gif) Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 1808
![Blog](/data/images/blog.gif) | May 25th, 2007 at 04:04am aah, here we go again with the "less is more" and " simplicity is bliss"... both are 100% true when it comes to this here. I loved the wording. Great work. |
lyrical_mess Falling In Love With The Board
![lyrical_mess](/data/board-avatars/00002/124230616559588.png) Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 5278
![Blog](/data/images/blog.gif) | May 25th, 2007 at 04:48am
Thank you all. |
Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days
![Peter Petrelli](/data/board-avatars/00002/120316672340348.png) Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 | May 27th, 2007 at 06:22am Oh, I really like this. I thought how you kept it short and sharp really added to the apologetic message you were making. Awesome. |