Beyond the Mix
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wait_what Geek ![]() Age: 38 Gender: Female Posts: 411 ![]() ![]() | The air smelled of a mix between Death and Daises. The sky hung gray as a rainbow peeked through just above the horizon- too shallow to be seen by Social Standards. I walked over the lush green hillside and stood in the field of Red, Purple, and Yellow wildflowers Waiting. You arrived a century too late… or was I just a millennia before my time? I smelled the Dainty scent of a wildflower as the sun exploded- turning my skin a red hue before fading away to Calmness. I picked up the wreckage and shaped a new life out of the bright rays, but all was Transient. I walked along the empty roads that led to the River where all of life had descended. There I could find no one. I continued on Alone through the blinding curves; never knowing what truth may be beyond my Grasp. The Moon rose, but was darkened to nothing against the black hole that once was a vast space of Hopes and Dreams that whispered fantasies to the Dreamers, romance to the Lonely, and wonderment to the Writers. All now send out elegant despairs to a dismantled World. The scent of Daises lingered in the air as the world crumbled further into a horrible Reality. |
worn-out astronaut. Had A Life Before GSB ![]() Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 28177 ![]() ![]() | I think its interesting. You arrived a century too late… or was I just a millennia before my time? Great line <3 |
wait_what Geek ![]() Age: 38 Gender: Female Posts: 411 ![]() ![]() | Thanks |
PONED Geek ![]() Age: - Gender: Female Posts: 257 | I liked it. Good Job ![]() |
wait_what Geek ![]() Age: 38 Gender: Female Posts: 411 ![]() ![]() | Thanks ![]() |
Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days ![]() Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 | Really gorgeous, but I'm curious to know why you chose to capitalise particular words. I can see why you chose to do this with some, but I'm a little unsure about others, especially Reality, and Daises towards the end of the poem. But I have to say that I thought; 'I walked over the lush green hillside and stood in the field of Red, Purple, and Yellow wildflowers Waiting.' was especially pretty; very simple description but it really works. |
wait_what Geek ![]() Age: 38 Gender: Female Posts: 411 ![]() ![]() | Absinthe Daniel: It's really hard to explain the capitalizations... besides that I want particular attention put on those select words. I can't really explain it any better than that. It makes perfect sense to me- I think for you to understand, you'd need to be me. ![]() Thanks, though. ![]() |
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