Destination_Unknown
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Posts: 105 | June 5th, 2007 at 06:43am In my dream, I feel your kiss
---------- a kiss that's long and sweet
In my dream, I feel your hug
---------- a hug thats long and full of love
In my dream, feel your hair
---------- your "run your finger through it" hair
In my dream I feel your shoulder
---------- your shoulder that I lean on
In my dream I lye next to you
---------- next to you under the stars
In my dream I am with you
---------- I am with you forever
In my dream I am yours
---------- yours forever to keep. |
PONED
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Posts: 257 | June 8th, 2007 at 08:40pm interesting
I like it. You finally are getting rhythym right, Great Job!!!  |
newagecarny
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Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 42495
 | June 10th, 2007 at 05:31pm It's okay, although too simple for my liking.
I don't like how you started both lines in the beginning with
In my dream, I feel your kiss
a kiss that's long and sweet
In my dream, I feel your hug
a hug that's long and full of love |
