newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 42495
 | July 12th, 2007 at 09:10pm I will drop emerald landscapes on rooftops' napes,
Watch them scorn in this burning cuddle of fury -
Elevate high, collapse low.
I'll get away with everything.
Let me rescue you from the violent sea waves
And carry you on my shoulders, my crooked spine
Until we descend no further.
We'll run away from everything.
The sun seized to exist, it surely despises me;
relentlessly handing me into the claws of shadows.
They slash my flesh so arrogantly slow,
But so do the stars, the scattered diamonds.
They tell me everything.
I seek no treasure, no pricey reward.
Rewind the scenes and I'd do it all over.
For once, believe me;
It was nothing. Nothing. |
Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 4161 | July 15th, 2007 at 12:04pm I haven't seen you on the boards in aaaaaaaages, and pieces like this always remind me how much I miss reading your poetry.
In the third verse, I think 'seized' should be 'ceased'. Just an observation. But I love the simplicity of your words, and I especially liked the comparison between stars and scattered diamonds. |
newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 42495
| July 15th, 2007 at 12:54pm Absinthe Daniel:I haven't seen you on the boards in aaaaaaaages, and pieces like this always remind me how much I miss reading your poetry.
In the third verse, I think 'seized' should be 'ceased'. Just an observation. But I love the simplicity of your words, and I especially liked the comparison between stars and scattered diamonds.
Writers block 
oh no, a typo 
thank you  |
votefordisco
Rotting On Here
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 45710
| July 20th, 2007 at 12:42am I love it. I love your writing because it's always really descriptive. Almost like a painting made with delicate brushes and soft, warm colours. It's beautiful, you really do bring out the beauty in the world.
(L) |
