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Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
 | July 16th, 2007 at 04:22am The life of a broken heart
An empty mind
A stolen part
A full coffin
An unheard woe
A cry for help
Wanting to let go
Just a sob story
My biggest fear
I see it now
It's getting near
A gentle kiss
A half full beer
That's all I've got
Where did you go?
I'd rather not
Explain to you
My hate is boiling over
I'm sick of everyone again
It's finally time to go
And when it came down to it
I reaped what I sowed |
Awkward.
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 10 | July 16th, 2007 at 04:28am Thats really good!!!!!
Really sad.
But awesome wording. |
Pito
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 104
Gender: Male
Posts: 2430 | July 16th, 2007 at 04:52am Hey, that twas pretty good! Keep it up!  |
Yeah thats me...
Geek
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 279
 | July 16th, 2007 at 06:04am I love it.
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Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
| July 16th, 2007 at 06:57am Thanks every one |
Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
| July 17th, 2007 at 01:40am Anyone else? |
Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
| July 30th, 2007 at 10:42pm Anyone? |
syco-cheechoo2
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 98
| July 31st, 2007 at 01:32am Black My Eyes:The life of a broken heart
An empty mind
A stolen part
A full coffin
An unheard woe
A cry for help
Wanting to let go
That is a very good way to get the point across. Very deep, and its a great opener to a poem
Black My Eyes:Just a sob story
My biggest fear
I see it now
It's getting near
A gentle kiss
A half full beer
Also a good part. not as good as the begginng but it is still good.
Black My Eyes:That's all I've got
Where did you go?
I'd rather not
Explain to you
My hate is boiling over
I'm sick of everyone again
It's finally time to go
And when it came down to it
I reaped what I sowed
^probably my favorite, and best part of the poem. great closer. good job. |
Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
| July 31st, 2007 at 04:01am Why thank you.....
Hope fully my writers block will pass and I can write more poems..............
Thanks everyone |
syco-cheechoo2
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 98
| July 31st, 2007 at 04:26pm Find a way to inspire yourself, wether it be a song, or something else. it will usually make the writers block pass. |
Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
| July 31st, 2007 at 08:54pm I have tried that
But when I try to write something
It just doesn't come to me |
Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
| August 1st, 2007 at 05:07am Any one else? |
Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
| August 3rd, 2007 at 09:40pm Any one? |
Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
| August 8th, 2007 at 07:44am Any one else? |
Squid.
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 2940
| August 8th, 2007 at 08:22am Your rly good....i like that one a lot |
Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
| August 8th, 2007 at 08:49am Why thank you  |
Lovely_Gore
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 80 | August 9th, 2007 at 05:00pm that was awsome |
Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
| August 9th, 2007 at 07:51pm Thank you |
redeyeliner
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: 103
Gender: Female
Posts: 1
| August 12th, 2007 at 08:26am i really like it!
its good! |
Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
| August 12th, 2007 at 08:54pm Thank you |
