Jessie.Tastic!
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 5
 | September 8th, 2007 at 11:02pm “I’ll never let you fall”
Escaped your lips, so delicately,
For me.
It was all to hold my hand
And pull me down under.
With you beside me,
It makes it so much worse.
So close those eyes, boy
And press your lips together.
I’m not swimming this ocean alone
You are the only one to come to my aid.
When I drown with a mouthful of water
Breath air into me
And let me free. |
I Am So Beautiful! FUCK!
Jackass
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 1019
 | September 9th, 2007 at 10:18pm Oh wow. I really liked this. I don't really like how it was structured together but it is your poem so you have that right. All in all, I thought it was good. |
Misanthropist
Post Whore
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 23279 | September 12th, 2007 at 06:09am I totally thought it was about Australia because of the title at first 
anyway...I thought it was sweet. I don't know about the So close those eyes, boy
And press your lips together....
but that is probably just my personal taste. |
