Vikki Is Eyeless !
Idiot
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 775
 | November 1st, 2007 at 07:43pm Okay. I don't know if this counts but I submitted it for my English CourseWork and my teacher said she can see that marking as an A-A* as an opening standalone.
I stared at the person looking back at me. I instantly despised her. I saw her daily; her past haunted my every dream. She was everything that I hated. She had a lot of secrets, and demons too. Her evil grin reminded me of why I was here. She glared at me as if she didn't like me. Apart from the bloodied razor she held in her shaking hand, she stood dead still. Her arms were deeply slashed as fresh blood ran over old scars. Mascara stained her cheeks and every tear fell straight down, hitting the ground almost instantly. I watched a little longer before turning away from the mirror.
Let me know what you think please. |
newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 42495
 | November 1st, 2007 at 08:18pm oh the razorblades and bleeding mascara.
Next time try something that hasn't been done 38465394862 times before  |
miau
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 4469 | November 4th, 2007 at 08:35pm Although, I like how you think she's talking about another girl until the last sentence, where you discover she's been standing in front of a mirror. |
