Santa Billie
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 8285 | March 15th, 2006 at 10:23pm Every moment I lie awake
praying and praying for goodness sake
to let this myriad of pains go
but every night they continue to grow
pushing deeper, holding my wrists
oh, doesn't he notice my restlessness
my heart and soul is fading away
as he takes much pleasure in his rough play
has he ever looked down into my eyes
to see a little girl who never cries
who still somewhere has hopes and dreams
whose life has been torn at the seams
this monster lying on top of me
and I just cannot possibly see
him once doing this to Mommy too
though I did not need it, the answer I knew
but why can't he find another one
who can share his pleasure, share his fun
this stupid, horrible, sinful play
that everytime breaks a part of me away
but of the hopes I once had, instead
I wish one of these times I'll simply drop dead
I'd much rather be in heaven instead
than lying in this terrible, life-suffering bed |
Eliana Rampage
Jackass
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 1958 | March 15th, 2006 at 10:26pm Santa Billie:Every moment I lie awake
praying and praying for goodness sake
to let this myriad of pains go
but every night they continue to grow
pushing deeper, holding my wrists
oh, doesn't he notice my restlessness
my heart and soul is fading away
as he takes much pleasure in his rough play
has he ever looked down into my eyes
to see a little girl who never cries
who still somewhere has hopes and dreams
whose life has been torn at the seams
this monster lying on top of me
and I just cannot possibly see
him once doing this to Mommy too
though I did not need it, the answer I knew
but why can't he find another one
who can share his pleasure, share his fun
this stupid, horrible, sinful play
that everytime breaks a part of me away
but of the hopes I once had, instead
I wish one of these times I'll simply drop dead
I'd much rather be in heaven instead
than lying in this terrible, life-suffering bed
It's good. Has great potential, but I couldn't help but notice a few forced rhymes;
to let this myriad of pains go
but every night they continue to grow
^ As an example. But myriad is a cool word. ^_^ Keep up the great work!
-Eli |
Santa Billie
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 8285 | March 15th, 2006 at 10:28pm XxBillieOwnsXx:Santa Billie:Every moment I lie awake
praying and praying for goodness sake
to let this myriad of pains go
but every night they continue to grow
pushing deeper, holding my wrists
oh, doesn't he notice my restlessness
my heart and soul is fading away
as he takes much pleasure in his rough play
has he ever looked down into my eyes
to see a little girl who never cries
who still somewhere has hopes and dreams
whose life has been torn at the seams
this monster lying on top of me
and I just cannot possibly see
him once doing this to Mommy too
though I did not need it, the answer I knew
but why can't he find another one
who can share his pleasure, share his fun
this stupid, horrible, sinful play
that everytime breaks a part of me away
but of the hopes I once had, instead
I wish one of these times I'll simply drop dead
I'd much rather be in heaven instead
than lying in this terrible, life-suffering bed
It's good. Has great potential, but I couldn't help but notice a few forced rhymes;
to let this myriad of pains go
but every night they continue to grow
^ As an example. But myriad is a cool word. ^_^ Keep up the great work!
-Eli
Yeah I see what you mean, but I wrote this about two years ago so I'm
not going to go back and fix it now... |
Eliana Rampage
Jackass
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 1958 | March 15th, 2006 at 10:29pm Oh?
Heh. I love posting older poetry. I look back and see how I've improved... |
Santa Billie
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 8285 | March 15th, 2006 at 10:33pm XxBillieOwnsXx:Oh?
Heh. I love posting older poetry. I look back and see how I've improved...
EXACTLY.
I love to look back on it because I'm always experiencing different emotions
and my poetry brings me back to those emotions. I'm glad I have all my
writing from the past because I could never write the same way I did
before as I do now... |
Eliana Rampage
Jackass
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 1958 | March 15th, 2006 at 10:34pm Santa Billie:XxBillieOwnsXx:Oh?
Heh. I love posting older poetry. I look back and see how I've improved...
EXACTLY.
I love to look back on it because I'm always experiencing different emotions
and my poetry brings me back to those emotions. I'm glad I have all my
writing from the past because I could never write the same way I did
before as I do now...
*Nod*
Also my reason for writing poetry is different. It used to be a way to vent...now it's because I enjoy it ^_^ |
Santa Billie
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 8285 | March 15th, 2006 at 10:37pm XxBillieOwnsXx:Santa Billie:XxBillieOwnsXx:Oh?
Heh. I love posting older poetry. I look back and see how I've improved...
EXACTLY.
I love to look back on it because I'm always experiencing different emotions
and my poetry brings me back to those emotions. I'm glad I have all my
writing from the past because I could never write the same way I did
before as I do now...
*Nod*
Also my reason for writing poetry is different. It used to be a way to vent...now it's because I enjoy it ^_^
Yeah when I wrote this and other poetry I was "depressed" so it was
DEFINITELY a way to "release".
And, you live in Massachusetts (sp)? I live in Rhode Island, so we live
right next door to eachother. My friend went to a GD concert in September
at Gillette... |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 2921
 | March 16th, 2006 at 04:18pm It was okay. As Eli said, a few forced rhymes, but it had potential.
And ZOMGZ we like went to the same concert!!!111  |
