Let Me Sleep, My Sensitive Heart Can't Breathe...
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| Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days  Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 | This isn't about me, I'm writing from the perspective of a character in a story I'm writing. I'm not too sure about it, to tell the truth, but I want to know what you guys think.  Panic attack. It all starts with harsh strangulation between my breasts; now I'm all 'cough-cough-cough' and can't suck the dirty atmosphere into my dismal It always seems to be the creative, sensitive hearts that are ensnared by lung dysfunction... the ones that can't cope without a shot of heavy metal beats and lyrical adrenaline. Blue's always been my favourite colour. So complimentary to his deep, darling brown eyes. His sweetheart kisses paint a more comforting rhyme than the contaminated air pricking at my chest. Scared. Really scared now. He's gently dabbing at the streaming tears staining my sickly cheeks; cradling me in his frantic arms; patting my tight, chokingly tense shoulders... he's the only one who hasn't faded under the hostile environment of my dusty respiration. My baby sweetheart; cascading medication butterflies onto my allergy ridden chest and soothing my asthma induced delirium. I'm sunken deep into the quiet bliss of unity... cocooned against adoration and the nurturing habitat of my creased bed sheets. It's what's under the skin that counts... it's just a pity that below my skin lies a pair of timid, stillborn lungs and suffocating oxygen. Sleep... to sleep... |
| killing loneliness Idiot  Age: - Gender: - Posts: 572 | |
| Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 | |
| Inari King For A Couple Of Days  Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 2538 | |
| snowcherry King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 3912 | It was beautiful, except for this bit: now I'm all 'cough-cough-cough' I dunno, I just didn't like that bit.. But I love everything else. Aaaaaand: I looove the title. |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days  Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451  | snowcherry: Ditto  |
| Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 | That's okay. Thank you for your honesty I have to say though, it one my favourite parts, even though it isn't particularly poetic or dressed up. |
| FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921 | I really like the 'cough-cough-cough' thing. It kinda caught me or something.  That was really awesome. I thought it summed up a panic attack really well, too, and it's quite hard to do that, especially if you've never experienced one. |
| killing loneliness Idiot Age: - Gender: - Posts: 572 | oh..ok then  but i still like it |
| Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 | [Flawless Error]: *huggles you* I've never experienced a panic attack, but I've come pretty close. And I used to have asthma when I was little. So that helped, a little. I just tried to think how it would actually feel to have an asthma attack, because I was too young to remember properly. |
| FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921 | |
| Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 |
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