Rites of Passage and Malanian Marriage Rituals

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Peter Petrelli
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May 8th, 2006 at 12:02pm
More fantasy driven babble. More like a story, really. And a bit weird...


All she needs is some soft reassurance, and a helping
hand down onto the delicate, nature kissed ground.
She flaps her wings and draws his shaking hands to
her aching stomach; painting his passion mellow
touch against their kicking, wriggling, hybrid baby
angels. Carrying twins takes its toll on even the
strongest hearts... never mind under the sunlight
scrutiny and stresses of magical marriage rituals.

They're blemished perfection; a mortal hybrid all
softly drowned in ruby dress robes, and his Malanian
Appafly sweetheart, brushed lightly with watercolour
embroidery and pregnant hiccups. It's always the
quiet, sensitive souls that need the most support.
His darling kisses soothe her anxiety and dizzy
flushes better than anything else. She's fighting
for more than two, and needs every ounce of help...

Flittering wings and ethereal declarations of cinnamon
affection. Pause. Breathe. She absorbs the tentative
sunlight through her angel blonde hair; into the
spine of her radiant Appafly wings; and against
her sleepy stomach. Fantasy need not be fiction;
they scribe their own velvet rhymes and archaic vows.
Binds of unity brought together and strengthened by
sweetheart fabrics and marital ribbons. Forever.

He'd even realign the stars if it made her more
comfortable. There's nothing like young, beautiful
love; fresh like snowdrop confetti and forget-me-not
kisses. Bound under mortal and Malanian law, they're
the sweetest hybrid lovers you could ever imagine.
Tradition is what you fabricate it to appear as.
They're the bindings of a new tradition... the first
page of softly traced books and scribe. Unity.
Inari
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May 8th, 2006 at 12:04pm
Gah!

*clutches chest*

That was so beautiful
It hurt.
snowcherry
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May 8th, 2006 at 12:30pm
Hey, you finished it! Very Happy


Wow, that was so beautiful.
Really, you have such a beautiful mind.
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Mibba
May 8th, 2006 at 01:21pm
It's really beautiful. It gets kinda repetitive though, like, some words are used over and over again. *Duks* Don't hurt me! Razz
Peter Petrelli
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May 8th, 2006 at 01:28pm
[QUOTE="WhatI thought that. I wasn't in the mood for re-drafting though. I think I used 'angel' a little too much.
Babi Kid Rachy
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May 8th, 2006 at 01:31pm
Wow, you write some great poems. Wink
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Mibba
May 8th, 2006 at 02:58pm
international_idiot:
[QUOTE="WhatI thought that. I wasn't in the mood for re-drafting though. I think I used 'angel' a little too much.

It's ok. The poem is great none the less. Yeah, 'angel' and 'hybrid' among other words.
You didn’t use them a lot but when first read it seems like it, ya know? Another thing is
that you use the same metaphors in a lot of your poetry.
It’s always equally beautiful but I think you should try to use new ones.
Btw, you know you rock. Cool
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Mibba
May 8th, 2006 at 04:18pm
I luff it as always, my sugarplum butterly. <3
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May 9th, 2006 at 04:22am
excellent
Peter Petrelli
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May 10th, 2006 at 09:54am
Thank you, sweethearts Very Happy Appriciation and criticism is always welcomed. *huggles you*
newagecarny
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Mibba
May 10th, 2006 at 01:56pm
Wow. Very Happy
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