imtwasidwelya
Geek
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 357 | May 10th, 2006 at 04:14pm rip it
draw it
make it real
show them off
for the feel
they mark the freedom
and despair
outrageous beckon
quick! they're there!
you can find them
almost anywhere
buttons maybe
or without
long or short sleeved
or none about
listen listen
can you hear?
the shout for shirts
Hooray! They're here! |
newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 42495
 | May 10th, 2006 at 04:25pm What's in a name?:Stop posting your short, meaningless poems here please. Take some time to develop some skills and read real poetry. Then come back because you aren’t improving at all right now.
I could give you some constructive criticism but I really don’t feel like writing an essay so yeah, just try to create unique yet understandable metaphors, make it flow and perhaps write a little bit more. Good luck.  |
