imtwasidwelya
Geek
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Posts: 357 | I would miss you
if you were gone
the pain would fill me
far too much
I love God
and I know
if he saw me suffer
like that he may have
tears but I also know
God would not want
to keep me from you if
you love me the same way
and God agrees we should
be together. |
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 2451
 | May 10th, 2006 at 05:47am Stop posting your short, meaningless poems here please. Take some time to develop some skills and read real poetry. Then come back because you aren’t improving at all right now.
I could give you some constructive criticism but I really don’t feel like writing an essay so yeah, just try to create unique yet understandable metaphors, make it flow and perhaps write a little bit more. Good luck.  |
MistressDoom
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Posts: 108 | May 10th, 2006 at 05:51am What's in a name?:Stop posting your short, meaningless poems here please. Take some time to develop some skills and read real poetry. Then come back because you aren’t improving at all right now.
I could give you some constructive criticism but I really don’t feel like writing an essay so yeah, just try to create unique yet understandable metaphors, make it flow and perhaps write a little bit more. Good luck.
A little harsh but i do agree they need to be more 'lenghty' |
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 2451
| May 10th, 2006 at 05:53am MistressDoom:What's in a name?:Stop posting your short, meaningless poems here please. Take some time to develop some skills and read real poetry. Then come back because you aren’t improving at all right now.
I could give you some constructive criticism but I really don’t feel like writing an essay so yeah, just try to create unique yet understandable metaphors, make it flow and perhaps write a little bit more. Good luck.
A little harsh but i do agree they need to be more 'lenghty'
I know but that’s who I am. I’m just honest. 
I’m pretty nice compared to some people around here though. |
newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
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Posts: 42495
| May 10th, 2006 at 05:55am What's in a name?:
I’m pretty nice compared to some people around here though.
MWUHUHUHAHA. |
Sylar
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 5703 | May 10th, 2006 at 06:05am What's in a name?:Stop posting your short, meaningless poems here please. Take some time to develop some skills and read real poetry. Then come back because you aren’t improving at all right now.
I could give you some constructive criticism but I really don’t feel like writing an essay so yeah, just try to create unique yet understandable metaphors, make it flow and perhaps write a little bit more. Good luck.
Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaamen |
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 2451
| May 10th, 2006 at 03:04pm Ella:What's in a name?:
I’m pretty nice compared to some people around here though.
MWUHUHUHAHA.
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Baguelle
King For A Couple Of Days
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Posts: 2727 | May 11th, 2006 at 12:55am Cliche. |
