imtwasidwelya
Geek
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 357 | May 12th, 2006 at 05:51am the beautiful angel locked inside
gets to hear how happy I am
every papercut every scar
I am such a masochist.
I feel like washing my car. |
clark
GSBitch
Age: 31
Gender: Male
Posts: 79047 | May 12th, 2006 at 05:56am  Kinda short..
And I don't think I understand it  |
newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 42495
 | May 12th, 2006 at 06:02am Wow, such creative rhyming...  |
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 2451
| May 12th, 2006 at 06:10am Please! Enough already. That "poem" sucks and I'm tired of giving you advices and constructive criticism (since you apparently don’t listen). STOP POSTING! |
Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | May 12th, 2006 at 06:27am That one wasn't your best.
The last line of the poem really throws it.
Maybe if you developed the first verse a little then it could work.
I like your work.
It definately shows some potential.
With practise I'm sure you'll be a great poet. |
imtwasidwelya
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Posts: 357 | May 12th, 2006 at 07:01am It is actually about an evil sado-masochist. |
