radioactive
Geek
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 338
 | May 12th, 2006 at 11:43am wish i could be with u again
you said you loved me,
you said you cared,
you said she was nothing,
but you went out with her anyway,
now im a victim,
drowning in my pain,
why do i still love you,
why do i miss your touch,
your voice,
your love,
theres nothing i can do,
exept sit here and think about you,
when im wishing i could tell you,
that i still need you,
i still want you,
i still love you,
but i dont know why,
the only answer i need to know,
is if im wasting my time, or you still love me too.
the way we used to be, was it real, or was it just a dream?
my heart still bleeds for you. |
rage;love;clark
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Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 494 | May 12th, 2006 at 12:01pm hmmmmmmmm.......... it's pretty good....i think you could have been more creative, but other than that, i like it. |
radioactive
Geek
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 338
| May 12th, 2006 at 12:02pm thanks |
radioactive
Geek
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 338
| May 12th, 2006 at 01:54pm look if your just gonna look at it and read it...dont even read it at all. comment it lemme know what you think god dammit! |
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 2451
| May 12th, 2006 at 02:04pm It’s very repetitive and unoriginal. The flow isn’t the best.
I think you can do much better so keep writing. |
rage;love;clark
Geek
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 494 | May 12th, 2006 at 02:19pm What's in a name?:It’s very repetitive and unoriginal. The flow isn’t the best.
I think you can do much better so keep writing.
that's kind of what i wanted to say...thank you for putting it into words  |
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 2451
| May 12th, 2006 at 02:30pm rage;love;clark:What's in a name?:It’s very repetitive and unoriginal. The flow isn’t the best.
I think you can do much better so keep writing.
that's kind of what i wanted to say...thank you for putting it into words
Hey, no problem. |
radioactive
Geek
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 338
| May 13th, 2006 at 06:25am like i said i put it together randomly so i wasnt really putting it into a "form" |
Ex.Of.A.Freak.-TCD
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 87
Gender: Female
Posts: 5844
 | May 13th, 2006 at 06:40am Oh wow.
O__o
You know what? You just explained how I feel right now. Thank you.
It's awesome. |
newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 42495
| May 13th, 2006 at 07:02am What's in a name?:It’s very repetitive and unoriginal. The flow isn’t the best.
I think you can do much better so keep writing.
I agree.
Also, work on your spelling a bit, and try stanzas  |
Addison Montgomery.
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 7078
| May 13th, 2006 at 10:12am It's ok but could've flown better |
