the life of a bubble

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wegrowintothenumbers666
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
wegrowintothenumbers666
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May 19th, 2006 at 09:22am
a bubble is like our soul
so dull and gray
it lets us sleep through night and wake in th day
it floats through the air like a tiny balloon
then drifts away and goes so soon
newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
newagecarny
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Mibba
May 19th, 2006 at 09:23am
It's pretty weak. Confused
wegrowintothenumbers666
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
wegrowintothenumbers666
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May 19th, 2006 at 09:25am
..thanx...i feel..extremely special.....yea...all my poems are weak...but i dont care...i guess ill just stick to writing stories...they seem to be better
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Idiot
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May 19th, 2006 at 09:59am
i likey Cheers

it describes me! he he he he ha ha ha mwhahaaaa
It Had to Be You.
King For A Couple Of Days
It Had to Be You.
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May 19th, 2006 at 01:19pm
Capitalization? Grammar? Punctuation? Metaphors?

Hun, I don't see those. If you want to make a decent poem, you need to master those qualities I mentioned.

Better luck next time.

Very Happy
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