killing loneliness
Idiot
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Posts: 572 | May 12th, 2006 at 02:46pm sitting in one of those corners
where she hid herself from the light
when she felt abandoned by herself.
a glass of wine to every tear cried
this time it wasn't a normal
fight on the street or an accidental kiss
this time it was heartache
blood dripping from her sliced veins
she met this really cute guy
they had hit it off pretty quick
red roses in the mornings
and hot loving at midnight
it looked as if her life was complete
she had everything she wanted
and then it happened
and her former life was no more
her sweetheart boyfriend left her
for some unnececery hooker
Maddy dearest was forced into the corner
and there she slit her veins
she rested her back against the heater
hot blood, oozing down her hands
her eyeliner tears falling onto the white carpet
whilst she stares at her sweethearts picture
she took her black roses
her old and beaten blood-red dress
dressed up like death herself
and sat into her little corner
there she lay,
untill her last heartbeat
untill her last breath
untill death came to take her away |
Kookie1099
Idiot
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Posts: 620 | May 19th, 2006 at 12:25pm I <3 this poem can I use it in my story? |
love.
King For A Couple Of Days
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Posts: 2844 | May 19th, 2006 at 12:46pm thats really really good  |
It Had to Be You.
King For A Couple Of Days
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Posts: 3593 | May 19th, 2006 at 01:09pm It was alright. For future reference, make sure to check all your grammar because there were a few grammatical errors.
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Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 4161 | May 19th, 2006 at 01:10pm I don't like it. Maybe that's just my own preference.
I'm only being honest.
I think it was too harsh; you could've used metaphors instead of just saying 'slit wrists'. |
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 2451
 | May 19th, 2006 at 02:24pm ^ exactly what I wanted to say. |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 2921
| May 19th, 2006 at 02:48pm international_idiot:I don't like it. Maybe that's just my own preference.
I'm only being honest.
I think it was too harsh; you could've used metaphors instead of just saying 'slit wrists'. Same. I did like the first stanza though. |
Megan.
Falling In Love With The Board
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Posts: 6962 | May 19th, 2006 at 02:51pm [Flawless Error]:international_idiot:I don't like it. Maybe that's just my own preference.
I'm only being honest.
I think it was too harsh; you could've used metaphors instead of just saying 'slit wrists'. Same. I did like the first stanza though. |
rollerpig
GSBitch
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 62283 | May 19th, 2006 at 03:05pm international_idiot:I don't like it. Maybe that's just my own preference.
I'm only being honest.
I think it was too harsh; you could've used metaphors instead of just saying 'slit wrists'.
yep .. though I liked a few parts of it. |
