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keasbey
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 3660 | May 19th, 2006 at 09:35pm The little things that used to be
Oh so very much to me
Have withered up and blown away
Comptimplating words to say
The constant raping in the pain
Has brushed to making me insane
Fall Behind.
For that I cannot do recall
Of that throughout the depths of fall
Only being deep and dark
That retched knife drawn through the heart
And what not known what lives or dies
Or hath been lead to my despise
It lies dead.
The beaming face of what once was
Will never lie as thought it does
For never shaking what it keeps
To bow the head, it gently weeps
This I never will forget.
Things that I do much regret
It goes on. |
keasbey
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 3660 | May 19th, 2006 at 11:00pm Anyone? |
keasbey
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 3660 | May 19th, 2006 at 11:03pm Opinions (even insults) are greatly appriciated. |
Misanthropist
Post Whore
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 23279 | May 19th, 2006 at 11:06pm I like the last stanza the best. I do think it could use a bit of work, but overall it was okay. |
keasbey
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 3660 | May 19th, 2006 at 11:08pm Vita-Koolaid:I like the last stanza the best. I do think it could use a bit of work, but overall it was okay. Considering I wrote it in about 7 minutes, I'd agree. |
Santa Billie
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8285 | May 19th, 2006 at 11:08pm Are you talking literally about rape?
And I'm confused, what do you regret? |
keasbey
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 3660 | May 19th, 2006 at 11:26pm Santa Billie:Are you talking literally about rape?
And I'm confused, what do you regret? No, and no. I'ts just a bunch of metaphors. |
Santa Billie
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8285 | May 19th, 2006 at 11:28pm How is you regretting something a metaphor?
It's not working for me...
I'm even more confused now. |
White Riot
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 4761 | May 19th, 2006 at 11:51pm I thought it was very good *claps* |
KayCool123
Geek
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 147 | May 20th, 2006 at 12:07am It's ok... |
Sara.
This Board Is My Home
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 31155 | May 20th, 2006 at 12:24am Santa Billie:How is you regretting something a metaphor?
It's not working for me...
I'm even more confused now. |
keasbey
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 3660 | May 20th, 2006 at 01:21am Santa Billie:How is you regretting something a metaphor?
It's not working for me...
I'm even more confused now. Good. I don't know. You're not supposed to get it. That's part of it. |
keasbey
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 3660 | May 20th, 2006 at 01:22am White Riot:I thought it was very good *claps* Thank you, Brandi. Thank you very much. |
Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | May 20th, 2006 at 12:46pm That's pretty cool. I liked that. |
