She, Who Now Lives In Heaven

She came from the heavens, she came from the stars.
She soothed the pain, helped heal the scars.
The angels took her, now she’s gone.
She’s not here, now I can’t belong.

She was my friend, the best, was she.
She was always happy, so full of glee.
Her memory will live on, as will her name,
As long as her best friend and I remain.

My life is empty, can I go on
With out her smile helping me carry on?
I want to cry, but I’m too sad.
The pain of it all just hurts too bad.

I can’t laugh, I can’t smile, not with her gone
I don’t think I’ll be able to ever move on
I can’t believe it, I won’t believe it
But what’s done is done, she’s done her bit.

Never, no never, will I ever forget
The angel in heaven, the little starlet
I never told her how much I care
I’ll cherish the feeling I’ll never share.

I’ll reunite with her one day, I will
When my heart stops and my body is still.
Her best friend will be there, all three of us
Where the skies and grass are forever lush.

She came from the heavens, she came from the stars.
She soothed the pain, helped heal the scars.
The angels took her, now she’s gone.
She’s not here, now I can’t belong.


I know it's corny, but its about my friend who died, so i just figured i'd put it up, seewhat u guys thought of it. it's a bit fucked up coz i was upset, but im k now, so read the fuckin thing... OR ELSE!!!

I love the first and last stanza. They’re beautiful and the rhyming isn’t forced at all. It also flows terrifically well. The other stanzas are a whole different story though. They seem forced and are kinda choppy. If you’d only used the rhyme scheme for the first/last stanza and free verse for the other ones it would have been awesome I think. Now it’s merely good.