Forever Broken

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Ex.Of.A.Freak.-TCD Falling In Love With The Board Age: 87 Gender: Female Posts: 5844	May 22nd, 2006 at 01:29pm Look into my eyes, And tell me you're truly sorry. Look into my eyes, And say you didn't mean it. I know you can't, And I knew you did. You never loved me, It was all a lie. When you've finally realized what you've done, You'll look up to find me gone. Against the window, the rain spells out, "Forever broken, without a doubt."
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921	May 22nd, 2006 at 02:56pm It was okay, seemed a bit predictable to me. Liked the last two lines though. =]
What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451	May 22nd, 2006 at 03:49pm I have to second that. ^ Exactly what I wanted to say.
Meski Addict Age: 32 Gender: Male Posts: 14856	May 22nd, 2006 at 03:58pm NICE!!!
Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161	May 23rd, 2006 at 06:43am It was okay. A little simple, though. The message has been used so many times, yours just isn't different.
B.J Falling In Love With The Board Age: - Gender: Male Posts: 8105	May 23rd, 2006 at 06:45am It's ok I have to agree with the first 2 though but good try! Keep it up
It Had to Be You. King For A Couple Of Days Age: - Gender: - Posts: 3593	May 23rd, 2006 at 06:51am Tre Is Spelt Into My Arm: Look into my eyes, And tell me you're truly sorry. Look into my eyes, And say you didn't mean it. I know you can't, And I knew you did. You never loved me, It was all a lie. When you've finally realized what you've done, You'll look up to find me gone. Against the window, the rain spells out, "Forever broken, without a doubt." When I read the first line, I thought you were going to type that Bryan Adams song, "Everything I Do (I Do it for You) Silleh me. When you've finally realized what you've done, You'll look up to find me gone. Against the window, the rain spells out, "Forever broken, without a doubt. I liked this stanza. The rhyming seemed a little forced but that's K.

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