Forever Broken

Look into my eyes,
And tell me you're truly sorry.
Look into my eyes,
And say you didn't mean it.

I know you can't,
And I knew you did.
You never loved me,
It was all a lie.

When you've finally realized what you've done,
You'll look up to find me gone.
Against the window, the rain spells out,
"Forever broken, without a doubt."

It was okay, seemed a bit predictable to me. Liked the last two lines though. =]

I have to second that. ^
Exactly what I wanted to say.

NICE!!!

It was okay. A little simple, though. The message has been used so many times, yours just isn't different.

It's ok
I have to agree with the first 2 though
but good try!
Keep it up

Tre Is Spelt Into My Arm:

Look into my eyes,
And tell me you're truly sorry.
Look into my eyes,
And say you didn't mean it.

I know you can't,
And I knew you did.
You never loved me,
It was all a lie.

When you've finally realized what you've done,
You'll look up to find me gone.
Against the window, the rain spells out,
"Forever broken, without a doubt."

When I read the first line, I thought you were going to type that Bryan Adams song, "Everything I Do (I Do it for You)

Silleh me.

When you've finally realized what you've done,
You'll look up to find me gone.
Against the window, the rain spells out,
"Forever broken, without a doubt.

I liked this stanza. The rhyming seemed a little forced but that's K.