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Dead End Girl
Addict
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 10219 | May 21st, 2006 at 03:59pm I couldn't think of a name so...
There it is.
It's just a little couplet, single stanza thing.
And don't kill me for the rhymes D:
Make yourself mosaic
That cannot be denied
Scematics of internal heartache
Exterior design
Cut out your heart in resignation
This love tumor has grown benign
And give away all your hope
As to keep your soul in line |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 2921
 | May 21st, 2006 at 08:19pm Pwnage. 
I like little rhymes like that. =] |
It Had to Be You.
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 3593 | May 21st, 2006 at 08:25pm Cut out your heart in resignation
This love tumor has grown benign
 Beautiful dahling!
VOULEZVOUS!
^That's mah new saying. <3
...
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imtwasidwelya
Geek
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 357 | May 21st, 2006 at 10:20pm I don't like this poem! |
Rhiannon.
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 2999
| May 21st, 2006 at 10:28pm imtwasidwelya- how can you say that!? this is awesome. |
imtwasidwelya
Geek
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 357 | May 21st, 2006 at 10:33pm I don't like it when people think of hurting themselves.
The poem is about cutting yourself up to "keep your soul in line" as if there is no hope to be had for one's self even when they have been giving hope to others.
Hope is like an eternal spring... it never dries out. |
Eliana Rampage
Jackass
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 1958 | May 21st, 2006 at 10:36pm imtwasidwelya:I don't like it when people think of hurting themselves.
The poem is about cutting yourself up to "keep your soul in line" as if there is no hope to be had for one's self even when they have been giving hope to others.
Hope is like an eternal spring... it never dries out.
So when someone's mother is dead, and they themselves are parlyzed, deaf, blind and mute they have no right to lose hope?
I love hope but I'm sorry, that's crap.
People in Africa lost hope decades ago, or at least most of them.
It's called life...Jesus. -_-
BACK TO THE POINT.
HOLY CRAP.
That was INCREDIBLE.
INCREDIBLE YOU HEAR?
I loved the imagery in that, LOVED IT.
...
O_O
I wish I could write like that. |
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 2451
| May 22nd, 2006 at 01:06pm I usually never comment on your stuff because I never really like it (most of the time). But others seem to think it’s brilliant so there’s really no need for any criticism from me.
Anyway, I really like this one. Great imagery and I love that you don’t force rhymes.
That’s not too common. Good job.  |
Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 4161 | May 22nd, 2006 at 02:29pm It's amazing. I love it so much. *hugs poem* |
newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 42495
| May 22nd, 2006 at 05:09pm That's definitely one of the best things I read lately. |
Zoie
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 6370 | May 22nd, 2006 at 05:10pm That was amazing. Great job! |
Dead End Girl
Addict
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 10219 | May 22nd, 2006 at 11:20pm imtwasidwelya:I don't like it when people think of hurting themselves.
The poem is about cutting yourself up to "keep your soul in line" as if there is no hope to be had for one's self even when they have been giving hope to others.
Hope is like an eternal spring... it never dries out.
It's actually not about cutting o.o;...
I actually meant it to be about breaking youself up and putting youself together as to help yourself bcome a better peson o_o; |
Santa Billie
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 8285 | May 22nd, 2006 at 11:33pm That's very well-written, I definitely see some talent with your poetry!
Haha, who am I to say, I know, but seriously... |
whersermind
Geek
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 165
| May 22nd, 2006 at 11:43pm that's so fucking awesome... |
razzledgirl
Jackass
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 1491
| May 23rd, 2006 at 01:33am i really liked it, even though its a easy poem, the words can be hard to come up with. |
Skullivan.[Im Not Okay]
Geek
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 225 | May 23rd, 2006 at 01:59am fucking awesome! really really loved it! so beautiful!! |
Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | May 23rd, 2006 at 09:35am That's so cool.
I really like that  |
rollerpig
GSBitch
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 62283 | May 23rd, 2006 at 09:46am I loved it. It's short, but that doesn't bother. |
