Driving over Leaves in the Rain

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Mibba
May 22nd, 2006 at 07:50pm
Gah. The whole title didn't fit in the subject. So anyway, new structure-type-thing going on here. Not that different, but whatever.

Hit the Brakes. It's Too Dangerous Driving over Leaves in the Rain

You’ve almost got me
Driving over leaves in the rain.
Don’t risk it, can’t risk it.
That stoplight seems
To be coming closer fast.
Now we hit the brakes.

Why don’t you stop? Before

You would draw a picture
Of the end of the world
As long as it fit your mood.
Explosions and fire,
Forget the angels, dear.
This sketch is just for you.

A portrait of the blinding light that
Echoes from the shattering glass.
Careful it doesn’t get in your eyes.
It’s a real shame you just can’t
Dodge your way out from
The forefront of this solecism.

Why didn’t you move? Now

You’ve got me way past
Driving over leaves in the rain.
I’ve risked it, did risk it.
That stoplight didn’t seem
To be doing any stopping.
I never hit the brakes. Sorry.
It Had to Be You.
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May 22nd, 2006 at 08:29pm
A portrait of the blinding light that
Echoes from the shattering glass.
Careful it doesn’t get in your eyes.
It’s a real shame you just can’t
Dodge your way out from
The forefront of this solecism.


Wonderful hun! Up
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Mibba
May 22nd, 2006 at 08:51pm
Thank you. =]
Dehren McGhengland
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May 22nd, 2006 at 09:37pm
That was good. Cool
Misanthropist
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May 22nd, 2006 at 11:47pm
A portrait of the blinding light that
Echoes from the shattering glass.
Careful it doesn’t get in your eyes.
It’s a real shame you just can’t
Dodge your way out from
The forefront of this solecism.


Very good.
razzledgirl
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Mibba
May 23rd, 2006 at 01:31am
it was confusing, but i loved the words you used, i still loved it.
Skullivan.[Im Not Okay]
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May 23rd, 2006 at 02:06am
i like the concept of "driving over leaves in the rain" as if its like the dangers of life and how you can hurt people [was that how it was supposed to come out like??] i really liked it
Bunny Rabbit [fromxhell]
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May 23rd, 2006 at 02:30am
Up Lovely! =]
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Mibba
May 23rd, 2006 at 05:41am
Very, very good. Cool You have this great stile about your writing that i really like.
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May 23rd, 2006 at 05:54am
Surprised thats the best thing i've ever read on here
Peter Petrelli
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May 23rd, 2006 at 06:26am
I can't choose a favourite part. It just rocks. Amazingly. Awwwww. Your talent makes me jealous.
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Mibba
May 23rd, 2006 at 06:28am
Stunning.
clark
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May 23rd, 2006 at 06:34am
Amazing. Very Happy
B.J
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May 23rd, 2006 at 06:46am
I just love it
truly stunning
Inari
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May 23rd, 2006 at 09:33am
Shocked
That's got to be my favourite one of your poems.
I adore that so much!

You would draw a picture
Of the end of the world
As long as it fit your mood.
Explosions and fire,
Forget the angels, dear.
This sketch is just for you.

I'm totally in love with this part.
Buddy Christ
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May 23rd, 2006 at 09:49am
That was great. Very Happy
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May 23rd, 2006 at 09:52am
Yeah ^^ I love it.
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Mibba
May 23rd, 2006 at 02:45pm
Shocked Shocked Shocked Holy crap, you guys. I didn't expect this to go over that well! Thank you soooo much!

And to Ruler of Sporks: Yes, you completely got the concept of the poem! Makes me happy to know that people actually get what I'm writing about. Very Happy

Again, thank you all immensely. Very Happy Very Happy Very Happy
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