Kyna
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Posts: 435 | May 24th, 2006 at 10:11am Look for your love in all the right places
in your dreams you may see their faces
dance to your own music don't be scared if you dare
don't think about sugar plums they will not be there
Look for your love it's not wrong if you try
it is much better than wasting your time
but don't jump for joy at the first chance you see
because it may be a long time before true love will meet |
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
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 | May 24th, 2006 at 05:04pm I kinda like it in a way. It’s sweet. I hate the rhymes however.
I can’t stand what seems to be forced rhyming. Also, use punctuation.
Btw, you will probably become an excellent poet in time.  |
Kyna
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Posts: 435 | May 24th, 2006 at 05:10pm What's in a name?:I kinda like it in a way. It’s sweet. I hate the rhymes however.
I can’t stand what seems to be forced rhyming. Also, use punctuation.
Btw, you will probably become an excellent poet in time.
Punctuation I can do but I have affection for rhyming. |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
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| May 24th, 2006 at 05:12pm Kyna:What's in a name?:I kinda like it in a way. It’s sweet. I hate the rhymes however.
I can’t stand what seems to be forced rhyming. Also, use punctuation.
Btw, you will probably become an excellent poet in time.
Punctuation I can do but I have affection for rhyming. If you like rhymes just try not to make them so forced next time. Try rhyming more complex words. Trust me, it can come out a hell of a lot better sounding. |
Garrett Hanlund
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 | May 24th, 2006 at 05:25pm I like it. Although I agree, the rhyming does seem a bit forced. I'm taking this poem to heart. thank you. |
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King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 35
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| May 24th, 2006 at 05:36pm Kyna:What's in a name?:I kinda like it in a way. It’s sweet. I hate the rhymes however.
I can’t stand what seems to be forced rhyming. Also, use punctuation.
Btw, you will probably become an excellent poet in time.
Punctuation I can do but I have affection for rhyming.
I said I hate forced rhyming. I really love good rhyming.
That takes some skills though. But just follow my dear soulmates
(AKA [Flawless Error]) advice and you’ll do fine. |
