The Doctor
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 8786
  | May 24th, 2006 at 07:42pm Crappy venting. Don't ask about the title... haha
Invisible
Thankfully gone under estimated and unnoticed
Even Sarah Plain and Tall has more style than me
But I indulge in my isolation
Sweet bitterness floods my mouth
And I once again fade into the scenery
Some say that there is a forcefield around us
An aura or something
Red auras mean couragous and romance
Spoiled by their persistant fiery tempers
Only can be calmed by the soothing green auras
If their spite is not inflamed
Dignified blue auras are noble and gracious
When those melancholy souls are cheerful
Cheered up only by the energetic orange auras
If they are not mistaken as a warning omen
Yellow auras are bright and sunny and happy
When they are not running from their own cowardice
Brought down to earth by regal purple auras
When they are not being pompus and self rightous
And I?
I have a beige aura. Fit for a beige world
Ready for my own marching orders from the powers that be
Dreary and predictable and downright dull
My brain numbed by narcotics and subliminal messages
I am a living breathing robot.
No-one can reach me, no one can tame me
There's nothing to tame |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 2921
| May 24th, 2006 at 08:10pm Overall, I think it was okay. You had some really good lines in there though. Didn't like this line:
An aura or something
It didn't sound poetic at all. =/ |
